Method for editing and enhancing readability of authored documents

ABSTRACT

A method for editing and enhancing readability of authored documents is presented. The method comprises a stage 1, stage 2, stage 3, and stage 4. Stage 1 includes searching for occurrences of first signs, the first signs selected from a list comprising “it,” “there,” “in,” “of,” “as,” “or,” “that,” and the punctuation marks “.” and “;”; removing phrases matching any entry on a list of commonly used unnecessary phrases that begin with or contain “it,” “there,” “in,” “of,” “as,” “or,” or “that.”; replacing common cliches and redundancies with equivalents as found in list; replacing common lengthy construction with equivalents as found in list; and searching for common redundant pairs as found in list and eliminating a first word of the pair.  
     Stage 2, includes searching for occurrence of second signs, the second signs selected from a list comprising “am,” “is,” “was,” “were,” “are,” “been,” and “be”; replacing phrases matching any entry on a list of commonly used unnecessary phrases that contain “of”; replacing nominalizations with equivalents as found in a list; and replacing passive voice construction with equivalents as found in a list; and replacing common weak construction with equivalents as found in list.  
     Stage 3 includes searching for remaining prepositions and making substitution according to list.  
     Stage 4 includes searching for pairs of commas separated by more than three words; searching for the same or synonymous nouns and verbs appearing more than once; searching for more than one negated verb in a sentence; and search for word “any” following a negated verb.

FIELD OF THE INVENTION

[0001] This invention relates generally to writing composition and, morespecifically, to aids for composing concise English.

BACKGROUND OF THE INVENTION

[0002] A writer looks at a sentence. The sentence is grammatical, butwordy, dull, and difficult to understand. The writer wants to make thesentence succinct, lively, and easier to read. Where does the writerbegin?

[0003] The problems facing the writer arise from infinite combinationsof unnecessary words, passive voice, weak verbs, and convolutedconstruction. For years, writing texts and teachers have addressed theseproblems using technical terms—participle, idiom, subjunctive, relativepronoun—or generally advised writers to add vigor to their sentences bywriting in the active voice. Nothing offers the writer an editing methodthat is quick, precise, repeatable, and productive.

[0004] The most revered of all writing texts is Strunk and White'sclassic, The Elements of Style. The heart of this book is Rule 13, “Omitneedless words,” and the often quoted lines:

[0005] “Vigorous writing is concise. A sentence should contain nounnecessary 30 words, a paragraph no unnecessary sentences, for the samereason that a drawing should have no unnecessary lines and a machine nounnecessary parts.” (p. 17)

[0006] Strunk and White add, “[m]any expressions in common use violatethis principle:” They list seven examples:

[0007] “the question as to whether

[0008] there is no doubt but that

[0009] used for fuel purposes

[0010] he is a man who

[0011] in a hasty manner

[0012] this is a subject that

[0013] his story is a strange one”

[0014] Strunk and White intended the list to exemplify common wayswriters express themselves using too many words. Millions more exist,and a writer cannot memorize them all.

[0015] The most widely read and acclaimed book on writing for lawyers isRichard Wydick's Plain English for Lawyers. Wydick titles Chapter Two,“Omit Surplus Words.” Two sections form the core of the chapter: “AvoidCompound Constructions” and “Avoid Word-Wasting Idioms.” Wydick's listof “Compound Constructions” is: (p. 11)

[0016] “at that point in time

[0017] by means of

[0018] by reason of

[0019] by virtue of

[0020] for the purpose of

[0021] for the reason that

[0022] in accordance with

[0023] inasmuch as

[0024] in connection with

[0025] in favor of

[0026] in order to

[0027] in relation to

[0028] in the nature of

[0029] prior to

[0030] subsequent to

[0031] with a view to

[0032] with reference to”

[0033] In his section “Avoid Word-Wasting Idioms,” Wydick writes,“Likewise, words like case, instance, and situation spawn verbosity:

[0034] in some instances the parties can

[0035] in many cases you will find

[0036] that was a situation in which the court

[0037] RICO claims are now more frequent than was formerly the case

[0038] injunctive relief is required in the situation in which

[0039] in the majority of instances the grantor”

[0040] But how does even a competent writer or editor distinguishbetween “idioms” and “compound constructions” and keep track of thethousands of each that can arise?

[0041] A writer makes a wordy sentence even more dull and difficult toread by using passive voice and nominalizations (nouns that should beverbs). The frequent use of passive voice is the most infamous of allwriting problems. Teachers and texts constantly remind writers to avoidit, yet few writers know how to recognize it, how to make it active, orwhen it is necessary.

[0042] Strunk and White have little to say about passive voice: “Theactive voice is usually more direct and vigorous than the passive.” And,“This rule does not, of course, mean that the writer should entirelydiscard the passive voice, which is frequently convenient and sometimesnecessary.” And, “The habitual use of the active voice, however, makesfor forcible writing.” (p. 13). They give examples but do not say how torecognize it or when it is necessary. They even confuse the reader bytalking about “transitive verbs in the active voice,” which has littleto do with the passive voice problem.

[0043] When Wydick discusses passive voice (pp. 27-9), he offers onlyvague clues on how to recognize it, nothing direct, specific, andrepeatable; then, like Strunk and White, he tells the writer to preferthe active voice; and last, unlike Strunk and White, he gives foursituations in which the passive voice may be proper. But the writerstill has no method for recognizing it and no guidance for making itactive.

[0044] Another writing text that addresses passive voice is The CarefulWriter. A Modern Guide to English Usage, by then Assistant ManagingEditor of The New York Times, Theodore M. Bernstein, (1965, Atheneum).Similar to the explanations found in many writing and grammar texts,Bernstein describes passive voice like this: “When the subject of theverb is the agent performing an action, and the object is that which isacted upon, the verb is in the active voice. When the subject of theverb is the recipient of the action, the verb is in the passive voice.”(p. 13). Abstract explanations like this make the passive voice problemsound mysterious and unsolvable. Bernstein mentions nothing about how torecognize quickly what might be a passive verb.

[0045] Nominalizations cause as much slowing and dulling as passivevoice, but few people have even heard the word, let alone know how torecognize one. Like passive voice, a few nominalizations are necessary,but usually a writer should convert them to their verb form. Strunk andWhite do not discuss nominalizations. Neither does Bernstein. Wydickwarns against using them and suggests: “You can spot most of the commonnominalizations by their endings: al ment ant ence ion ent ancy encyance ity”

[0046] To help them spot nominalizations, then, the writer and editormust memorize and search for all ten of these suffixes.

[0047] Despite hundreds of writing texts that have tried to explain whatmakes a sentence wordy or dull, despite all of the lists of uselesswords, intelligent people still write like this:

[0048] A high school senior in Honors English with a 3.9 GPA:

[0049] It was during this time that many citizens, particularlystudents, came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen's three principles ofthe people had not yet been accomplished through the bloody hardships ofwar.

[0050] A lawyer:

[0051] It should be noted that an oral notice of intent to renew, wherea written notice is required under the terms of the lease, is sufficientto constitute an effective exercise of the option.

[0052] The editors of the Harvard Management Communication Letter in anarticle on writing:

[0053] The writer wants to ask a question about whether or not investorswill learn from the crash in prices.

[0054] And the Dean of Admissions at Stanford University:

[0055] Although it has been argued that emphasizing the AchievementTests in admissions, rather than SATs, would improve the quality ofAmerican secondary school education and consequently better preparestudents for college, it is also true that requiring such tests couldunfairly penalize disadvantaged students in the college admissionsprocess.

[0056] All of these are grammatical, intelligent sentences, but they arenot nearly as clear and taut as the writers could have produced (eventhough the last two were also professionally edited for publication);and each example comes from among myriad sentences with similarproblems.

[0057] The problem of wordy, dull sentences pervades even the mostaugust of our literary references. Few people would quibble thatFowler's Modern English Usage, The Chicago Manual of Style, and TheOxford English Dictionary are at the pinnacle of reference works reliedupon by writers and editors. Yet:

[0058]Fowler's explains “reduplicated words” like this:

[0059] Most of us find an engaging quality in these words. Perhaps thatis because it is through them that we enter the world of speech . . .

[0060]The Chicago Manual of Style contains this sentence, elaborating onAmericans preferring to place punctuation inside the quotation mark:

[0061] In defense of nearly a century and a half of the American style,however, it may be said that it seems to have been working fairly welland has not resulted in serious miscommunication.

[0062] And the editors of The Oxford English Dictionary define“redundancy” as:

[0063] The incorporation of extra parts in the design of a mechanical orelectronic system in such a way that its function is not impaired in theevent of a failure.

[0064] Programmers have designed software to help writers spot problemselectronically. By far the most popular editing software is MicrosoftWord, which gives the writer “Readability Statistics.” This tells thewriter how many paragraphs, sentences, words, and characters are in theselection, plus the average number of characters per word, words persentence, and sentences per paragraph. It can signal “long sentence” or“wordiness” or “contraction use.” It tells the percentage of passivesentences (which sometimes is inaccurate). And it assigns the passage a“Readability Grade Level” according to something called the“Flesch-Kincaid” test. But the real problem with readability has littleto do with how many words are in a sentence or how many syllables are ina word.

[0065] Apply Microsoft Word's® grammar checker to this sentence . . .

[0066] There's really no choice in the matter.

[0067] . . . and it tells the writer that the sentence is written at afourth grade level, then suggests that the writer remove thecontraction:

[0068] There's really no choice in the matter.

[0069] There is really no choice in the matter.

[0070] According to Word®, the writer cannot improve the sentence beyondthis. If the intelligent writers above apply Microsoft Word's® grammarchecker to their sentences, the program offers the following advice:

[0071] The high school senior:

[0072] It was during this time that many citizens, particularlystudents, came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen's three principles ofthe people had not yet been accomplished through the bloody hardships ofwar.

[0073] Word® notes that “Yat-sen's” is “Not in the dictionary.” It alsotells the writer that the sentence is passive (it doesn't say where) andwritten at a 12^(th) Grade level. Word® says nothing else about thesentence.

[0074] The lawyer:

[0075] It should be noted that an oral notice of intent to renew, wherea written notice is required under the terms of the lease, is sufficientto constitute an effective exercise of the option.

[0076] Word® labels this sentence passive. It doesn't say the sentencecontains two passive verbs, or where it's passive, or that the lawyercan correct anything else.

[0077] The Harvard editors:

[0078] The writer wants to ask a question about whether or not investorswill learn from the crash in prices.

[0079] Word® has nothing to say about this example, except that it iswritten at a seventh grade level.

[0080] The Stanford Dean of Admissions:

[0081] Although it has been argued that emphasizing the AchievementTests in admissions, rather than SATs, would improve the quality ofAmerican secondary school education and consequently better preparestudents for college, it is also true that requiring such tests couldunfairly penalize disadvantaged students in the college admissionsprocess.

[0082] Here, Word® claims that the sentence is not passive (it is),rates the sentence at a 12^(th) grade reading level, and indicatesnothing else wrong.

[0083] If the editors of the three reference works above use the Word®grammar checker to comb their entries:

[0084] The editors at Fowler's will learn that Word® finds nothing wrongwith their sentence:

[0085] Most of us find an engaging quality in these words. Perhaps thatis because it is through them that we enter the world of speech . . .

[0086] The editors at The Chicago Manual of Style will see Word® labelthe problem with their sentence as “wordiness” and suggest that theyremove “fairly.” Without saying where or how to change it, Word® willalso note that the sentence is passive, which it is, but another problemoverrides that point. According to Word®, they cannot improve the restof the sentence.

[0087] In defense of nearly a century and a half of the American style,however, it may be said that it seems to have been working fairly welland has not resulted in serious miscommunication.

[0088] In defense of nearly a century and a half of the American style,however, it may be said that it seems to have been working well and hasnot resulted in serious miscommunication.

[0089] The editors at The Oxford English Dictionary will discover thatWord® highlights “not impaired,” then diagnoses the problem as“wordiness,” and offers “no suggestions.” Word® also will highlight “theevent” and suggest that the editors replace those words with “case.”That's the end of Word's® assessment.

[0090] The incorporation of extra parts in the design of a mechanical orelectronic system in such a way that its function is not impaired in theevent of a failure.

[0091] The incorporation of extra parts in the design of a mechanical orelectronic system in such a way that its function is not impaired incase of a failure.

[0092] Imagine a law firm partner who expects to spend one to two hoursreviewing and editing an associate's brief, but instead has to spendfive or six hours, and cannot bill for that extra time; a corporateofficer who receives several five-page reports from mid-level managers,when each manager could convey the same information in three or fourpages; a copy editor who has to tighten a 500-page manuscript ondeadline. Imagine a patent examiner who has to wade through thousands ofunnecessary words to find the meaning the writer intends to convey. Thenimagine that these writers had a method that helped them edit, so theycould retain their individual voices, but convey the same meaning fasterand in far fewer words.

[0093] That is the essence of good writing: Words that do not conveymeaning to a reader not only are useless, they also get in the way ofthe words that are trying to convey meaning. They must come out.

[0094] If a writer could consistently delete even three words from a12-15 word sentence, then 10 pages of words drops to fewer than eightpages, yet the writer still conveys the same meaning to the reader. Forinstance:

[0095] The high school senior could have written:

[0096] During this time many citizens, particularly students, realizedthat the bloody hardships of war had not accomplished Sun Yat-sen'sthree principles of the people.

[0097] instead of:

[0098] It was during this time that many citizens, particularlystudents, came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen's three principles ofthe people had not yet been accomplished through the bloody hardships ofwar.

[0099] The lawyer could have expressed a complicated thought moreclearly, like this:

[0100] [Even] where the lease requires written notice, an oral notice ofintent to renew exercises the option.

[0101] instead of like this:

[0102] It should be noted that an oral notice of intent to renew, wherea written notice is required under the terms of the lease, is sufficientto constitute an effective exercise of the option.

[0103] The Harvard editors could have trimmed a little more:

[0104] The writer wants to question whether investors will learn fromthe crash. from what they started with:

[0105] The writer wants to ask a question about whether or not investorswill learn from the crash in prices.

[0106] And the dean needed far fewer words to say what she meant:

[0107] Emphasizing the Achievement Tests, rather than SATs, mightimprove American secondary school education and better prepare studentsfor college; but requiring such tests could unfairly penalizedisadvantaged students.

[0108] rather than what she wrote:

[0109] Although it has been argued that emphasizing the AchievementTests in admissions, rather than SATs, would improve the quality ofAmerican secondary school education and consequently better preparestudents for college, it is also true that requiring such tests couldunfairly penalize disadvantaged students in the college admissionsprocess.

[0110] Even our most popular reference texts on words and writing wouldimprove by ridding sentences of unnecessary words and bringing them tolife.

[0111] The sentences from Fowler's could have appeared like this:

[0112] Most of us find an engaging quality in these words. Perhaps thatis because through them we enter the world of speech . . .

[0113] instead of like this:

[0114] Most of us find an engaging quality in these words. Perhaps thatis because it is through them that we enter the world of speech . . .

[0115] In the Chicago style manual, we could have read the followingsentence quickly and gone on to the next:

[0116] For nearly a century and a half, however, the American styleseems to have worked fairly well.

[0117] rather than having to read:

[0118] In defense of nearly a century and a half of the American style,however, it may be said that it seems to have been working fairly welland has not resulted in serious miscommunication.

[0119] And in The Oxford English Dictionary we could have learned that a“redundancy” is:

[0120] Incorporating extra parts in a mechanical or electronic system sothat if one part fails, the system will continue to function.

[0121] yet the version we had to read defined it as:

[0122] The incorporation of extra parts in the design of a mechanical orelectronic system in such a way that its function is not impaired in theevent of a failure.

[0123] A reader has to read every word the writer writes. The moreuseless words a reader has to sort through, the longer the reader takesto arrive at the writer's meaning. Because all writers intend tocommunicate, they would delete these useless words, enliven theirsentences, and rearrange the sentences for greater clarity, if they knewhow to detect and solve the problems. Nothing currently in text,electronic, or any other format reveals or addresses this, yet allwriters and editors need this capability to refine their sentences.

[0124] There is, therefore, an unmet need in the art for a system andmethod for writing concise English which systematically identifies andremoves useless words.

SUMMARY OF THE INVENTION

[0125] The invention provides the writer with a defined set of 12 signsand their meaning, plus lists of typically unnecessary words andphrases, many of which contain the signs. The signs appear in allwriting, that of students, professors, lawyers, professional writers,CPAs, high school principals, CEOs, secretaries, managers, and those whocreate insurance policies. They appear in patent applications. Theinvention's unique premise is that each sign indicates a highmathematical probability that an editing problem exists. Like thedoctor, the writer spends time efficiently by examining the words aroundthe signs. Once the writer addresses the signs, the writer frequentlyfinds other problems that have no signs, but that the writer might neverhave noticed without the editing dynamic set in motion by the signs.

[0126] The invention does not tell the writer what to do; it suggeststhat to begin the editing process, the writer look first for thesesigns, for they indicate most of the editing problems. By going directlyto the signs and examining the words around them, a writer or editor canquickly spot and correct a majority of these problems, leaving readerswith sentences that are easier to read and understand. To use theinvention, writers do not have to sacrifice style or write like otherwriters; the signs help them refine and enhance their individual voicesWriters do not need to memorize thousands of what Strunk and White call“expressions in common use” that violate their principle, “Omit NeedlessWords.” Using the invention, a writer can quickly spot all seven of theexamples they list and a majority of the others every time:

[0127] “the question as to whether

[0128] there is no doubt but that

[0129] used for fuel purposes

[0130] he is a man who

[0131] in a hasty manner

[0132] this is a subject that

[0133] his story is a strange one”

[0134] Writers do not need to know the difference between Wydick's“Idioms” and his “Compound Constructions”; the invention will direct thewriter to 15 of Wydick's 17 “Compound Constructions”:

[0135] “at that point in time

[0136] by means of

[0137] by reason of

[0138] by virtue of

[0139] for the purpose of

[0140] for the reason that

[0141] in accordance with

[0142] inasmuch as

[0143] in connection with

[0144] in favor of

[0145] in order to

[0146] in relation to

[0147] in the nature of

[0148] prior to

[0149] subsequent to

[0150] with a view to

[0151] with reference to”

[0152] and all six of his “Word-Wasting Idioms”:

[0153] in some instances the parties can

[0154] in many cases you will find

[0155] that was a situation in which the court

[0156] RICO claims are now more frequent than was formerly the case

[0157] injunctive relief is required in the situation in which

[0158] in the majority of instances the grantor

[0159] Using the invention, the high school senior could delete nine ofher original 33 words, or over 25%; the lawyer could cut his sentence inhalf; the Harvard editors could trim 19 words to 12; and the Stanforddean could reduce 49 words to 28 words. They all would still say thesame thing, but their readers would have less work to do and could graspmore information faster. The invention enables writers and editors to dothis.

[0160] The invention provides a system and method for writing conciseEnglish.

BRIEF DESCRIPTION OF THE DRAWINGS

[0161] The preferred and alternative embodiments of the presentinvention are described in detail below with reference to the followingdrawings.

[0162]FIG. 1 is a [INSERT DESCRIPTIONS OF PARTICULAR EMBODIMENT]; and,

[0163]FIG. 2 is a [_]

DETAILED DESCRIPTION OF THE INVENTION

[0164] Referring to FIG. 1, a method 10 for identifying and removingneedless words from written English is presented. By way of overview,the method comprises four stages. Each stage, in its turn, serves toremove common impediments to lively communication. Before examining themethod in depth, a summarizing overview is set out.

[0165] While the method will work on single sentences, it is not limitedto single sentences. Because the sentences forming a paragraph arerelated, the paragraph may, in some applications, be the optimum unit ofwords to edit. The method will work whether the writer or editorsearches one, two, a few, or several paragraphs at a time. The writer oreditor selects the number of sentences to examine at each pass. Theinvention searches the desired number of paragraphs in four stages, byinteracting with the writer or editor. At each stage, the inventionimplements one or more lists.

[0166] The Stage One is the first routine of the method and includes twocomponents: at a block 20, the first component comprises a list of theeight signs that indicate a likelihood of unnecessary words: “it,”“there,” “in,” “of,” “.,” “as,” “or, ” and “that.” At blocks 22, 24, 26,and 28, the second component comprises lists of typically unnecessaryphrases that contain one or more of these eight signs, plus lists oftypical cliches, redundancies, weak construction, unnecessary words, andpairings of words in which the first word is unnecessary. At the block22, the method 10 searches the sentence in question for entries on alist of commonly used unnecessary phrases and removes them accordingly.At the block 24, the method 10 uses a similar search for common cliches,and makes suitable replacement from the list. At the block 26, a similarsearch locates common lengthy constructions and replaces them with pareddown constructions for livelier prose from the list. Finally, at theblock 28, the similar search finds common redundant pairs and againmakes suitable substitution. Among the paragraphs the invention searchesfor the eight signs, plus matches to the words, phrases, and weakconstruction on the lists.

[0167] In one presently preferred embodiment, a computer softwareprogram selects a portion of the writer's text to examine. Uponselection, the program searches for the listed signs and then marks themby either highlighting or dimming the signs and matches found on thelists for the writer to consider deleting. Dimming is one presentlypreferred means of executing the marking process. One of the mostdifficult aspects of writing well is seeing what does not need to be inthe sentence. By dimming the likely candidates, the invention in thispresently preferred embodiment allows the writer to see more easily howthe sentence might appear without these words and often realize thatwithout them the sentence still conveys the meaning the writer intended.

[0168] Completing Stage One makes the writing clear and concise. Whenthe writer has reviewed the marked words and deleted the unnecessaryones, the writing now contains less clutter, and the writer instructsthe invention to begin Stage Two.

[0169] In Stage Two, at a block 30, the invention ceases to mark theunused signs from Stage One and begins to search for and mark the suffix“ion”; the seven “to be” verbs, “am,” “is,” “was,” “were,” “are,”“been,” and “be”; and at a block 32, the word “of” (again). The writerexamines each marked word or suffix, looking for nominalizations, at ablock 34, passive voice, at a block 36, and the weak construction oftenfound around “to be” verbs, at a block 38.

[0170] Completing Stage Two enlivens the writing. After the writer hasconverted passive voice to active and nominalizations to verbs, ordecided to leave them, the writer now instructs the invention to proceedto Stage Three.

[0171] In Stage Three, the invention ceases to mark the unused signsfrom Stage Two and begins to search for and mark all remainingprepositions, excluding “of” and “in.” With the prepositions thusmarked, the writer reviews each to see if it begins a prepositionalphrase that over explains and therefore is unnecessary, at a block 40.

[0172] Completing Stage Three fine-tunes the writing. After reviewingthe marked prepositions and deleting more unnecessary words, the writertells the invention to continue to Stage Four, where the inventionsearches each sentence for pairs of commas separated by more than threewords, at a block 50, the same or synonymous nouns and verbs appearingmore than once, at a block 52, more than one negated verb within asentence, at a block 54 and the word “any” following a negated verb, ata block 56.

[0173] Completing Stage Four smoothes the writing and carries the readerforward.

[0174] Text supporting the method might also include an explanation ofeach sign and what it means to the writer. The method cannot simply lookfor and eliminate words as has been the practice in the prior art. Oftenthe signs themselves do not offend the reader; they do not exemplifypoor writing; they do not even mean there is a problem; the signs signalthere might be a problem, and based on mathematical probability, thewriter often enough will find something to improve that taking a closerlook at those signs is worth the writer's time.

Stage One It

[0175] The word “it” signals a clump of words the writer can usuallyremove or replace with fewer words. Typically, the “it” appears at thebeginning of a sentence, or at the beginning of a clause. If the “it” isa pronoun referring to something, like a tree, then the writer ignoresthe sign. Rarely, an “it,” even though not a pronoun, will remain, asin, “It was hot.”

[0176] Although “that” appears as another sign in Stage One, it alsoserves as a supporting sign accompanying “it.” The word “that” usuallyfollows an “it” by a few to several words as illustrated in all fourexamples below. If the word “that” does not follow an “it,” the “it” andthe next word to a few words may still come out, as in, “I write todiscover what it is I have written.” The word “that” reinforces theprobability of removing all or part of the clause beginning with “it.”For example:

[0177] It should be stated that the party did not have to register itscandidate before the deadline.

[0178] It was the position of Smith that Explorers are no more dangerousthan the average car.

[0179] Tom Williams was a good friend, and it was on the strength of hisreputation and recommendation that I was given a teaching-writingfellowship.

[0180] It was most likely that the prisoner escaped by posing as aguard.

[0181] If “that” appears in the sentence, the writer does one of threethings:

[0182] 1. deletes all of the words, from “it” through “that,” asdemonstrated below in Example 1;

[0183] 2. replaces the “it” and the words following with one or twowords that mean the same thing, usually keeping the word “that,” as seenbelow in Example 2; or

[0184] 3. deletes the “it” and the “that” and one or two other words(which most often will include a “to be” verb), but keeps the words withmeaning, as illustrated below in Examples 3 and 4.

[0185] Using these three alternatives, the author can immediatelyimprove the sentences as follows:

[0186] The party did not have to register its candidate before thedeadline.

[0187] Smith contended that Explorers are no more dangerous than theaverage car.

[0188] Tom Williams was a good friend, and on the strength of hisreputation and recommendation I was given a teaching-writing fellowship.

[0189] Most likely, the prisoner escaped by posing as a guard.

[0190] Referring to FIG. 2 a list 70 of weak formulations including theword “it” is presented. A simple template search will find theseformulations and remove them without doing violence to the meaning ofthe sentence.

[0191] Referring now to FIG. 3. The method 100, at a block 103, searchesfor the word “it.” If the method finds an “it” at a block 105, then themethod at a block 107 asks if the “it” is a pronoun. If the “it” is apronoun, at a block 106 the method decides to keep the “it.” At a block123 the method moves to the next rule.

[0192] If the method determines that the “it” is not a pronoun, then ata block 107 the method tries to match the “it” and the few wordsfollowing to a list of typically unnecessary phrases or weakconstructions that begin with “it.” If the method finds a match at ablock 107, it dims the words at a block 108, so the writer can read therest of the sentence without those words. At a block 121 the writerprobably deletes the match.

[0193] If the method finds an “it,” the “it” is not a pronoun, and the“it” and the words following do not match an entry from the list, thenthe method, at a block 109 searches for the word “that,” starting withthe second word after the “it” and continuing for several words. If themethod finds no “that” following the “it,” the writer removes the “it”and one to a few words following at a block 110. If at a block 111, thesentence still retains its meaning, the writer retains the sentencehaving deleted “it” and the one to a few words following, and proceedsto the next rule at the block 123.

[0194] Where the method finds a “that” at the block 109, at a block 110,the writer removes the “it” and the “that” and the words between at ablock 112. If the sentence still retains its meaning, the writer retainsthe sentence having deleted the “it” and the “that” and the wordsbetween at a block 111 and proceeds to the next rule at the block 123.If the sentence does not retain its meaning, the writer at a block 112examines the words between “it” and “that” to locate form of the verb“to be.” If a form of “to be” is present, the writer removes the “it”,“that”, and the “to be” form at a block 113. With the remaining words,at the block 121, the writer will recast the remaining words into asentence. Once complete, the method moves to the next rule at the block123. Where no for of “to be” is present, the writer, at a block 114,tries to replace the “it” and the words following with one or two wordsmeaning the same thing, usually keeping the “that.”

[0195] If the writer cannot get rid of all of the words at the block 113or replace them with other words at block 114, the writer at block 116tries to keep the one or two words with meaning between the “it” and the“that,” and deletes the other words, including the “it” and the “that”.If the writer cannot delete some of the words without the sentencelosing meaning, the writer keeps the words from the “it” through the“that” and proceeds to the next rule at the block 123.

[0196] If the sentence after removal of the “it”, “that”, and theremaining words, at the block 116, at the block 121, the method recaststhe remaining words in a more concise sentence. At the block 123, themethod moves to the next rule.

There

[0197] Referring to FIG. 4 a list 124 of weak formulations including theword “there” is presented. A simple template search will find theseformulations and remove them without doing violence to the meaning ofthe sentence.

[0198] Although encountered less frequently than “it,” the word “there”signals a clump of words the writer can usually remove or replace withfewer words. Sometimes, a “there” will remain, as in, “There went mylast dollar.” Typically, the “there” appears at the beginning of asentence, or at the beginning of a clause.

[0199] The word “that” usually follows a “there” by a few to severalwords, as illustrated in the example below. If the word “that” does notfollow a “there,” the “there” and one to a few words nearby may stillcome out For example, “There are few situations in which the idea wouldwork.” becomes, “The idea would work in few situations.” The word “that”reinforces the probability of removing all or part of the clausebeginning with “there.” If “that” appears in the sentence, the writerusually deletes the “there” and the “that” and one or two other words(which most often will include a “to be” verb), but keeps the words withmeaning:

[0200] There are three principles that help to resolve this issue.

[0201] Paying heed to the needless “There are” phrase yields:

[0202] Three principles help to resolve this issue.

[0203] Referring now to FIG. 5, a method 126 searches at a block 128 forthe word “there.” If at the block 128 the method finds a “there,” themethod tries at a block 129 to match the “there” and the few wordsfollowing to any entry on a list of known, weak constructions beginningwith “there.” If the method finds a match at a block 129, the methoddims the unnecessary words in the weak construction, at a block 130. Thewriter deletes the unnecessary words at a block 132, checks for the samemeaning at a block 134, and then proceeds to the next rule at a block136. If the method does not find a match, the method at a block 138searches for the word “that” two to several words after the “there.” Ifthe method finds no “that” following the “there,” at a block 132 thewriter mentally removes the “there” and one to a few words following. Ifthe sentence still retains its meaning, the writer at a block 136proceeds to the next rule.

[0204] If the method finds a “that” at a block 140, the writer tries toreplace the word “there” and the one to several words following with oneor two words that mean the same thing. In many instances, there is asuitable substitute clause with a livelier clearer meaning, usuallykeeping the word “that.” If such a lively clause exists, at a block 140,the writer substitutes the more lively clause at a block 142, and thenproceeds to the next rule at the block 136. If the writer cannot replacethe words at block 140, the writer at a block 144 tries to keep one ortwo of the words between the “there” and the “that” and delete the otherwords, including the “there” and the “that.” The remaining words arerecast into a sentence at a block 148. The writer then tests to see ifthe meaning is the same at a block 146. If so, then at the block 136,the writer proceeds to the next rule. If the writer cannot delete someof the words, the writer at a block 149 keeps all of the them andproceeds to the next rule at the block 136.

In

[0205] Scores of common unnecessary phrases begin with the word “in.”For example: in fact, in which, in addition to, in the event, in time,in the amount of, in order to, in his mind. Referring to FIG. 6, a list143 of weak formulations including the word “in” is presented. A simpletemplate search will find these formulations and remove them withoutdoing violence to the meaning of the sentence. The word “in” suggeststhat the writer scrutinize the “in” and the one, two, or three wordsthat follow to determine if all or part of the phrase can come out. Forexample:

[0206] Surely there can be little in this world more awful than thespectacle of a strong man in the moment when he is utterly weak andbroken.

[0207] In fact, the law in these cases indicates otherwise.

[0208] By simply removing the weak “in” clause, as a result of thetemplate search, the following result:

[0209] Surely there can be little more awful than the spectacle of astrong man when he is utterly weak and broken.

[0210] The law indicates otherwise.

[0211] Sometimes, an “in” and the one, two, or three words followingshould remain. Sometimes one word replaces an “in” and the one, two, orthree words following. For instance, “in the event” becomes “if,” “inthe amount of” becomes “for,” and “in the course of” becomes “during” or“when.” Occasionally, one word remains. For instance, “in an effort to”becomes “to.” The sign exposes many unnecessary words.

[0212] Referring now to FIG. 7, a method 150 commences at a block 153searching for the word “in.” Where the method finds an “in,” the method150, at a block 155, tries to match the “in” and the one to a few wordsfollowing to any entry on a list of known, unnecessary prepositionalphrases beginning with “in.” (See FIG. 5.) If the method finds a matchat a block 157, the writer deletes the unnecessary prepositional phraseat a block 158, and proceeds to the next rule, at a block 160. If themethod finds no match, the writer at a block 159 removes the “in” andthe rest of the prepositional phrase. If the sentence still retains itsmeaning, at a block 161, the writer proceeds to the next rule at theblock 160. If the sentence does not retain its meaning, the writer keepsthe prepositional phrase at a block 163 and proceeds to the next rule atthe block 160.

Of

[0213] The word “of” leads the writer to more unnecessary words andphrases than any other sign. It helps the writer see unnecessary wordsand phrases that are so common most writers don't realize they need tocome out. An “of” directs the writer to look to the left and to theright for words to delete. For example:

[0214] The purpose of this letter is to remind you that all fiscalyear-end reports are due July 30th. The first part of the letter givesyou the format for the report.

[0215] Simple attention to the presence of “of” yields:

[0216] This letter is to remind you that all fiscal year-end reports aredue July 30th. The first part gives you the format for the report.

[0217] That's better, but the writer could have deleted the words onboth sides of each of.

[0218] The purpose of this letter is to remind you that all fiscalyear-end reports are due July 30th. The first part of the letter givesyou the format for the report.

[0219] The meaningful portions of the two sentences are:

[0220] is to remind you that all fiscal year-end reports are due July30th.

[0221] gives you the format for the report.

[0222] Retaining these meaningful fragments and recasting the sentenceyields:

[0223] We remind you that all fiscal year-end reports are due July 30th.This gives you the format for the report.

[0224] And once the writer gets this far, the writer may edit evenfurther:

[0225] All fiscal year-end reports are due July 30th. Please follow thisformat.

[0226] A writer does not try to eliminate “of”s, but rather uses them tospot words with a high probability of being unnecessary. Sometimes awriter sees the word “of” and decides that it and the words around itshould remain.

[0227] Referring now to FIG. 7, a method 165 at a block 167 searches forthe word “of.” The method finds an “of” and at a block 169, tests forthe presence of a nominalization. Most words that end in “ion” are thenoun forms (nominalizations) of verbs: indication, examination,immersion. Nominalizations slow and dull writing, but few people haveheard the word. Good writers use verbs to produce livelier, more vividsentences. A few words end in “ion” but cannot be converted to verbs.They are not nominalizations. Also, a few verbs end in “ion” and shouldbe left alone, e.g., question, function, mention, position. Somenominalizations are necessary, but usually a writer should convert themto verbs. In accord, the method 165, seeks to convert the nominalizationinto its verb form at a block 171. With the remaining words, at a block173, the writer recasts the sentence with the nominalization in theconverted verb form. Once recast, at a block 179, the method 165 moveson to the next rule.

[0228] At a block 175, where no nominalization is present, the methodtries to match the phrase formed either by the “of” and the one to threewords preceding, or the “of” and the one to three words following to anyentry on a list of known, unnecessary phrases containing the word “of.”If the method finds a match at the block 175, the method deletes thematching unnecessary phrase at a block 177 and proceeds to the next ruleat the block 179. If the method does not find a match, the writer at ablock 181 removes the phrase ending with “of” to create a firstexemplar. At a block 183 the writer deletes the phrase beginning with“of” from the original sentence to create a second exemplar. The method165 weighs the first and the second exemplars at a block 185 to decidewhich best expresses the meaning intended. The method 165 selects thebetter exemplar at either a block 187 or 189, according to the weighingprocess. The method then compares the selected exemplar at a block 191,choosing either the exemplar, at a block 195, or the original, at ablock 193, according to the weighing process and then moves on to thenext rule at a block 179.

As

[0229] Although the word appears less frequently than “in” and “of,”similar to those words, “as” usually signals a small clump ofunnecessary words—as to, as such, as a general matter. The unnecessarywords may appear on either side of the “as,” or with a short phrasecontaining a double “as.” A list of examples is set out at FIG. 9a. Likeall signs, sometimes an “as” means nothing, but most of the time the“as” and words around it should come out:

[0230] The following are regarded as part of your normal overhead.

[0231] Many artists have used art as a medium to comment on socialinjustice.

[0232] Is each sentence as concise and direct as possible?

[0233] Removing “as” results in:

[0234] The following are part of your normal overhead.

[0235] Many artists have used art to comment on social injustice.

[0236] Is each sentence concise and direct?

[0237] Referring now to FIG. 10, a method 200 at a block 201 searchesfor the word “as.” If no “as” is present, the method 200 proceeds to thenext rule at a block 215. Where “as” is present, the method at a block203 tries to match the “as” and the one to a few words following to anyentry on a list of known, unnecessary phrases containing the word “as”and weak constructions containing two “as's” (FIG. 9a). If the methodfinds a match at a block 205, the writer deletes the unnecessary phraseor the unnecessary words in the weak construction. If the method findsno match, the writer removes the phrase or eliminates the weakconstruction to create an exemplar at a block 207. If the sentenceretains its meaning, the writer deletes the unnecessary phrase or theunnecessary words in the weak construction at a block 209, the method200 selects the exemplar at a block 213 and proceeds to the next rule atthe block 215. If the sentence does not retain its meaning, the writerkeeps all of the words at a block 211 and proceeds to the next rule at ablock 215.

Or

[0238] “Or” and the words following usually repeat the word or few wordsimmediately preceding the “or” and therefore are unnecessary. A classicexample is, “I don't know whether or not I am going.” Other examples:

[0239] She could not remember if she had or had not filed the report.

[0240] In a few words or less he told them about his trip.

[0241] Recognizing “or” as introducing a redundancy, removing it and theclause it introduces results in:

[0242] She could not remember if she had filed the report.

[0243] In a few words he told them about his trip.

[0244] Sometimes the “or” and the one to a few words that follow arenecessary: “He could either pull his emergency chute out by hand, orauger into the wheat field below.” But most of the time a writer canremove those words.

[0245] Referring now to FIG. 11. A method 220 at a block 221 searchesfor the word “or.” The method finds an “or” at a block 223 and tries tomatch the “or” and the one to a few words following to any entry on alist of known, unnecessary phrases beginning with the word “or” FIG. 9b.If the method 220 finds a match at a block 223, the method deletes theunnecessary phrase at a block 225. If the method does not find a match,the writer keeps all of the words and proceeds to the next rule at ablock 227.

That

[0246] The word “that” helps to spot unnecessary phrases beginning with“it” or “there.” “That” also appears frequently with weak constructionscontaining “to be” verbs that are not passive and do not indicatenominalizations. A writer should also examine the word “that” and thosewords around it for more words to delete. For example:

[0247] The simple fact was that no one had ever attempted to perform thetrick.

[0248] Once the writer is alerted to the lack of additional informationin the first clause ending in “that,” the writer transforms the sentenceto:

[0249] No one had ever attempted to perform the trick.

[0250] Sometimes the word, by itself, is often unnecessary, as in thisexample:

[0251] The iceberg was apparently as large as the one that they firstsaw.

[0252] Other times, only the presence of the word “that” is offensive tothe flow of the sentence:

[0253] The iceberg was apparently as large as the one they first saw.

[0254] Referring to FIG. 12. A method 230 at a block 231 searches forthe word “that.” If the “that” follows an “it” or a “there” by three toeight words is the last word of an introductory phrase with no “it” or“there” at the beginning, then the writer at a block 235 removes theintroductory phrase. If the sentence retains its meaning at a block 237,the writer proceeds to the next rule. If the sentence does not retainits meaning, the writer keeps all of the words at a block 239 andproceeds to the next rule at a block 249. If the “that” is not the lastword of an introductory phrase with no “it” at the beginning, then themethod at a block 241 removes the “that.” If the sentence retains itsmeaning, the writer at a block 249 proceeds to the next rule. If thesentence does not retain its meaning, the writer keeps the “that” at ablock 243 and proceeds to the next rule at a block 249.

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[0255] A writer should find each period and examine the few words thatprecede it. At the end of a sentence, the writer will often find“over-explaining,” which is a major problem with all writers.

[0256] Over-explaining does not mean rambling for pages; it means usingone, two, three, four, sometimes even more words that go beyond thepoint at which a reader already understands.

[0257] For example, the original version of the previous sentence read:

[0258] Over-explaining does not mean rambling for pages about sometheory the writer has; it means using one, two, three, four, sometimeseven more words that go beyond the point at which a reader alreadyunderstands what the writer is talking about.

[0259] Sentences are crisper, move faster, and sometimes become moredramatic, if the writer removes words that go beyond the point ofunderstanding.

[0260] Most over-explaining occurs at the end of a sentence, which islogical: The writer has written beyond where the sentence could haveended. Usually the over explaining will form a prepositional phrase or astring of prepositional phrases, as in Examples 1 and 2. Sometimes theover explaining is not a prepositional phrase, as in Example 3. InExample 3, the writer may choose between “as though it were hot” and “asthough it had burned him.”

[0261] 1) My biceps was being crushed to a pulp.

[0262] 2) He was fully clothed, though his shirt was ripped open infront.

[0263] 3) “‘Drop it!’ Wolf Larsen cried, and the hunter dropped it asthough it were hot and had burned him.”

[0264] Removing the over-explaining yields:

[0265] 1) My biceps was being crushed.

[0266] 2) He was fully clothed, though his shirt was ripped open.

[0267] 3) “Drop it!” Wolf Larsen cried, and the hunter dropped it asthough it were hot.

[0268] Referring to FIG. 13. A method 250 at a block 251 searches forthe punctuation “.” or “;”. Among a group of up to eight wordsimmediately preceding the period or semi-colon, the method 250 at ablock 253 searches backwards, beginning with the first word before theperiod, trying to match one or more words to any entry on a list 273 ofknown prepositions. (FIG. 14). If the method 250 finds a preposition, ata block 255, the method 250 examines the prepositions one at a time,starting with the preposition closest to the period or semi-colon; firstthe last preposition before the semi-colon or period, then the secondthe next-to-last preposition before the semi-colon or period, and so on,back to the eighth word. In a block 258, the method then identifies eachprepositional phrase corresponding to each preposition located. In ablock 260, the method 250, begins a loop starting with the prepositionalphrase corresponding to the first preposition. The method 250 removeseach prepositional phrase in its turn at a block 262, one at a time.Once the prepositional phrase is removed, the method recasts theremaining words into a new sentence at a block 264. The method 250,tests the recast sentence for meaning at a block 266. If the meaning islost, the method selects the original sentence for further analysis at ablock 268. If, on the other hand, the sentence retains its meaning, themethod 250 retains the recast sentence for further analysis. In eitherinstance, the method checks to determine whether this is the lastprepositional phrase at a block 270 and if not, the method analyzes thenext prepositional phrase at the block 260.

[0269] Once the method 250 determines the sentence as finally recastretains its meaning without one or more of the prepositional phrases thewriter at a block 262 proceeds to the next rule at a block 272.

Unnecessary Words

[0270] In the removal of unnecessary words exactly mimics the method 220set out above for removing redundancies set out in FIG. 11, blocks 221through 227. For each of the following unnecessary words or phrases, themethod finds the particular word or words in the sentence by comparisonto the list at the block 221. When located on the list at the block 223,the method 220 removes the located word or words at a block 225, andproceeds to the next rule at a block 227.

[0271] The same unnecessary words appear over and over in poor writing.The method can categorize and list 274 (FIG. 15) these words to compareto the words a writer uses. Where matches occur, the method can mark thewords for the writer to consider deleting.

[0272] In casual conversation, people sometimes speak in cliches becausethey can connect quickly, but on paper clichés sound trite and dull, asin, “Here is the bottom line.” and “But that's just the tip of theiceberg.” Good writers avoid clichés. A list 275 (FIG. 16) of clichés toavoid is presented.

[0273] A redundancy modifies another word. Although a redundancy isrepetitious, the repetition occurs as the redundancy repeats the essenceof the word it modifies. Because a redundancy repeats the essence ofanother word, it is unnecessary, for instance, “mandatory requirement”and “excess verbiage.” Effective writers avoid redundancies. A list 276of common redundancies (FIG. 16) is presented.

[0274] The more unnecessary words a writer puts into a sentence, theharder the reader has to work to find the meaning. A list 277 (FIG. 17)of phrases that typically should be shorter is presented. Many commonwords frequently add no meaning to the sentence and therefore areunnecessary, like “basically” and “just.” A writer should delete them.

[0275] More unnecessary words find their way into poor writing when awriter chooses a bloated expression that could reduce to one or twowords, for instance, “is indebted to” becomes “owes,” and “at the time”becomes “when.” A list 278 (FIG. 17) of word pairs in which the firstword typically is unnecessary is presented. A good writer will use themore succinct expression.

[0276] Last, a writer can cut in half even certain pairings of words.For example, “In this book authored by Ernest Hemingway . . . .” Or,“You will find detailed instructions provided in the handbook.”

[0277] The writer now directs the method to begin Stage Two.

Stage Two To Be

[0278] The seven “to be” verbs—am, is, was, were, are, been, andbe—serve three purposes: First, and foremost, a writer uses “to be”verbs to find passive voice. The presence of a “to be” verb does notmean a sentence is passive; it means the sentence has a significantprobability of being passive. Passive voice slows and dulls sentences.It is a device writers should use in one of only four circumstances. Ifnone of those circumstances exists, the writer should always write inthe active voice, which is more vivid and moves the sentence (and thereader) along faster. Too often, writers use the passive voice withoutrealizing it, and their writing sounds dull.

[0279] Passive voice is not mysterious. A passive sentence simplyreverses the order of an active sentence:

[0280] Active:

[0281] I hit the ball.

[0282] actor-act-object

[0283] Passive:

[0284] The ball was hit by me.

[0285] object-act-actor

[0286] Sometimes, a passive sentence has no actor:

[0287] The ball was hit.

[0288] A writer can easily recognize passive voice. Whenever a writersees one of the seven “to be” verbs (in the example above “was”), thewriter performs a two-part test: Part one, the writer looks immediatelyto the right for a “strong verb” (“hit”) (occasionally, one word willseparate the “to be” verb and the “strong” verb to modify the “strong”verb, e.g., “was not hit,” or “is purposely placed”).

[0289] If a writer does not see a strong verb immediately to the right(or separated by one word to the right), then the sentence is notpassive, and the writer looks for two other problems (discussed below)often revealed by “to be” verbs.

[0290] If a writer sees a “strong” verb to the right of the “to be”verb, then, part two, the writer looks to the left for the “object” ofthe “strong” verb (“ball”), which may be the immediately preceding wordor may be several words before. If the writer sees an object to theleft, completing the object-act-actor or object-act construction, thenthe writer knows the sentence is passive.

[0291] A writer wants or has to write in the passive voice when one offour circumstances arises:

[0292] 1) the writer does not know the actor;

[0293] 2) the writer knows the actor but does not want to reveal theactor;

[0294] 3) the writer wants to emphasize the actor by placing it at theend of the sentence;

[0295] 4) the writer decides that writing in the active this time isawkward and so prefers the passive

[0296] Second, the writer uses “to be” verbs to spot nominalizations.Nominalizations appear in a sentence because the writer has used thenoun form of a word instead of the verb. When a writer uses the nounform, the writer must create a new verb to support that noun, and thatnew verb will often be a “to be” verb. For example:

[0297] This is an indication of more serious problems.

[0298] This indicates more serious problems.

[0299] If the writer sees a “to be” verb, and, testing it first forpassive voice, determines that the word immediately to the right (“an”)is not a “strong” verb, and therefore that the sentence is not passive,then the writer continues searching to the right, two, three, four, fivewords, for a nominalization (“indication”). The writer may decide toleave the nominalization, or change it, as should happen here, to“indicates.”

[0300] A few words end in “ion” but cannot be converted to verbs. SeeFIG. 00. They are not nominalizations. Also, a few verbs end in “ion”and should be left alone, e.g., question, function, mention, position.Some nominalizations are necessary, but usually a writer should convertthem to verbs.

[0301] If a nominalization is capitalized, e.g., “Proposition 65,” orthe “ion” in a singular word does not appear at the end of the word,e.g., “positioning,” the method ignores the “ion.” If a nominalizationis plural or modified, the method will convert it to a verb less oftenthan it will a singular nominalization. Once the method marks anominalization, the writer may then decide which form of the word worksbetter, the noun or the verb. Usually, it will be the verb, but thereare exceptions. For example, the writer may prefer to write, “He gavethem directions.” rather than, “He directed them.”

[0302] The word “engaged” often precedes a nominalization: engaged inintimidation, engaged in bargaining, engaged in harassment. Although themethod would spot the first because of the “ion,” the method would notspot the other two without the warning word “engaged.” A list 349 (FIG.19) of the phrases containing nominalizations that do not end in “ion.”Other signs, discussed below, also help to find nominalizations.

[0303] Around some nominalizations, two or all three of the signsappear, an “of,” a “to be” verb, and the suffix “ion.” Around others,there are no signs, although most nominalizations will have at least onefor the method to spot.

[0304] Third, if the writer sees no strong verb to the right of the “tobe” verb and no nominalization farther to the right, then the writerlooks for something else around the “to be” verb to delete. Sometimesthis shows as a pattern of weak construction, either where one of thearticles, “a,” “an,” or “the,” follows the “to be” verb by one or twowords and in turn is followed by the word “that,” or “who,” or “where,”or “one”; or where the “to be” verb is followed by the word “one” andthe word “that” or “who.” For example:

[0305] 1) This is a car that will last a good ten years.

[0306] 2) They were a family who liked to camp.

[0307] 3) That was a hotel plan where meals were included.

[0308] 4) The old bicycle was a rusty one.

[0309] 5) This horse is one that can run.

[0310] 6) The girl was one who should have never left home.

[0311] Removing the nominalization results in much clearer prose.

[0312] 1) This car will last a good ten years.

[0313] 2) They liked to camp. OR The family liked to camp.

[0314] 3) On that hotel plan meals were included. OR That hotel planincluded meals.

[0315] 4) The old bicycle was rusty.

[0316] 5) This horse can run.

[0317] 6) The girl should have never left home.

[0318] Referring now to FIG. 18, a method 300 at a block 303 searchesfor all “to be” verbs: “am,” “is,” “was,” “were,” “are,” “been,” and“be.” The method dims the “to be” verb at a block 305 and marks the twowords immediately following. At a block 307, the method decides ifeither marked word is a “strong” verb. If one is, at a block 309 thewriter examines the words preceding the “to be” verb for an object tothe marked word. If the method finds the object at a block 309,confirming that the verb is passive, the writer at a block 311 decideswhether to keep the verb passive or make it active. If the writerdecides to keep the verb passive at a block 311, the writer continues tothe next rule at a block 345. If the writer decides to make the verbactive at block 311, then at block 313 the method 300 searches the wordsfollowing the “strong” verb for an actor. If the writer finds an actorat a block 313, the writer deletes the “to be” verb at a block 315,keeps the “strong” verb (and the word between the “strong” verb and the“to be” verb, if there is one), moves the object to a position after the“strong” verb, and moves the actor to a position before the “strong”verb, and deletes any words made useless by the conversion, beforecontinuing to the next rule. If the writer does not find an actorfollowing the “strong” verb, the writer deletes the “to be” verb at ablock 317, keeps the “strong” verb (and the word between the “strong”verb and the “to be” verb, if there is one), moves the object to aposition after the “strong” verb, and creates an actor, placing itbefore the “strong” verb, and deletes any words made useless by theconversion, before continuing to the next rule at a block 345.

[0319] If neither marked word following the “to be” verb is a “strong”verb at block 307, the method at a block 319 tries to match the “to be”verb, plus the three words preceding it and the five words following it,to any entry on a list of known weak constructions containing a “to be”verb, an article or the word “one,” and the word “who,” “where,” “one,”or “that.” If the method 300 finds a match, the method deletes thematching words at a block 321 and proceeds to the next rule.

[0320] If the method does not find a match at block 319, beginning withthe second word after the “to be” verb, the method 300 at a block 323tries to match any of the next five words to any entry on a list 350(FIG. 20) of known nominalizations that do not end in “ion.” If themethod 300 finds a match at a block 319, the method examines thenominalization at a block 325 to see if it is plural or modified orboth. If the nominalization is plural or modified or both, the writerprobably will keep the nominalization and proceed to the next rule at ablock 345. If the nominalization is neither plural nor modified, thewriter at a block 327 probably will convert the nominalization to itsverb form, recast the remainder of the sentence using the verb form at ablock 329, and proceed to the next rule at a block 345. If the methoddoes not find a match at block 323, beginning with the second word afterthe “to be” verb, the method 300 at a block 331 searches the next fivewords for a nominalization. If the writer finds a nominalization, thewriter examines it at a block 325 to see if it is plural or modified orboth. If the nominalization is plural or modified or both, at a block345 the writer probably will keep the nominalization and proceed to thenext rule. If the nominalization is neither plural nor modified, thewriter at a block 327 probably will convert the nominalization to itsverb form, recast the remainder of the sentence using the verb form at ablock 329, and proceed to the next rule at a block 345. If the writerdoes not find a nominalization at block 331, the writer keeps the “tobe” verb at a block 345 and proceeds to the next rule.

[0321] Whether a nominalization is present as set out at the block 331,is not always simply a matter of finding the “ion” ending. Referring nowto FIG. 22, a method 352 at a block 354 searches for any word ending in“ion” (or “ions). If at a block 354, the method finds a word ending in“ion,” the method at a block 356 tries to match the word to any entry ona list 348 (FIG. 19) of known nouns that end in “ion” but do not have averb form. If the method 352 finds a match at a block 356, the methodignores the word ending in “ion” and at a block 395 proceeds to the nextrule. If the method does not find a match at block 356, the method 352at a block 358 tries to match the word to any entry on a list of knownverbs that end in “ion.” If the method finds a match at a block 358, themethod ignores the word ending in “ion” and at a block 395 proceeds tothe next rule. If the method does not find a match at block 358, themethod at a block 361 tries to match the word to any entry on a list ofknown phrases containing nominalizations that end in “ion.”

[0322] If the method finds a match at block 361, the method at block 363dims the phrase containing the nominalization ending in “ion” and placesand marks the verb form of the nominalization immediately after it. At ablock 363, the writer accepts or rejects the change, converts thenominalization into the verb form at a block 365, recasts the sentencein the verb form at a block 367, and proceeds to the next rule at block395.

[0323] If the method does not find a match at block 361, the method dimsthe “ion” at a block 371 and marks the rest of the word. The writerexamines the nominalization at a block 371 to see if it is plural ormodified or both. If the nominalization is plural or modified or both,at a block 395 the writer probably will keep the nominalization andproceed to the next rule. If the nominalization is neither plural normodified, the writer converts the nominalization into the verb form at ablock 365, recasts the sentence in the verb form at a block 367, andproceeds to the next rule at block 395.

Of

[0324] Besides helping the writer find words with a high probability ofbeing unnecessary, the word “of” also follows immediately after manynominalizations. In Stage Two, the method uses the sign again to helpspot them. For example:

[0325] 1) have knowledge of (know)

[0326] 2) offer an indication of (indicate)

[0327] Referring again to FIG. 22, a method 352 at a block 375 searchesfor the word “of. ” If the method finds an “of” at a block 375 themethod marks the “of” at a block 169 and tries to match the wordimmediately preceding the “of ” to any entry on the lists 143 (FIG. 6),349 (FIG. 19), and 350 (FIG. 20) of known nominalizations, those endingin “ion” and those not ending in “ion.” From this point, the processexact tracks the rule as set out in the discussion of nominalizationsabove.

[0328] The writer now directs the method to begin Stage Three.

Stage Three Remaining Prepositions

[0329] Prepositional phrases often inhabit sentences but add no meaning.As explained above, writers typically find these phrases (overexplaining) at the end of a sentence, but they also appear elsewhere. Tolocate these other unnecessary words, the writer now combs the rest ofthe sentence for the common prepositions 273 (FIG. 14), like “at,”“from,” “'to,” “with,” “between.” The prepositional phrase beginningwith one of these words might come out with no loss in meaning. Forexample:

[0330] A frivolous lawsuit by a windfall-seeking plaintiff withvirtually no grounds could cost me easily $10,000.

[0331] An insurer who pays a loss under its policy acquires asubrogation claim against the wrongdoer.

[0332] Removing the over-explaining makes clearer, more active, and moreeasily read text:

[0333] A frivolous lawsuit could cost me easily $10,000.

[0334] An insurer who pays a loss acquires a subrogation claim againstthe wrongdoer.

[0335] If a preposition follows a verb, the method would likely leave inthe prepositional phrase, because prepositional phrases following verbsare almost always necessary.

[0336] Referring now to FIG. 23, the method 250 at the block 255searches for a match to any entry on a list of known prepositions (whichexcludes “in” and “of”). If the matched word follows immediately after averb at a block 257, the method at the block 272 and proceeds to thenext rule. If the preposition does not follow immediately after a verbat the block 257, then at the block 258 the method dims the matched wordand the word immediately following the matched word, then dims the nextthree words in a graduated line with each word closer to the matchedword dimmer than the word to its right. The writer finds theprepositional phrase among the gradually dimmed words and for eachprepositional phrase at the block 260 removes it at the block 262 andrecasts the sentence at the block 264. If the sentence retains itsmeaning at a block 266, the writer proceeds to the next rule at theblock 272. If the sentence does not retain its meaning at block 266, thewriter replaces the prepositional phrase at the block 268 and keeps theprepositional phrase and at the block 272 proceeds to the next rule.

[0337] The writer now directs the method to begin Stage Four.

Stage Four , - - - ,

[0338] A pair of commas within a sentence often signals eitherunnecessary information (a form of over explaining), or one thoughtinterrupting another thought. Unnecessary information should always comeout. Interrupted thoughts confuse and slow readers, and the writershould rearrange the thoughts so that one follows another. Afterexamining the words between the commas, the writer may decide theinformation is unnecessary:

[0339] For the film to come out, rather than remain in the can, theproducers must raise more money.

[0340] For the film to come out{,} rather than remain in the can{,}theproducers must raise more money.

[0341] For the film to come out, the producers must raise more money.

[0342] If the writer chooses to keep the information, the writer mayincorporate the interrupting clause into the flow of the sentence byediting a few words around it, as seen in the following example:

[0343] Labor shortages, which had always plagued his road-buildingefforts in sparsely populated Florida, would be greatly exacerbatedhere.

[0344] To enhance the flow, the writer substitutes “and” for the commato yield:

[0345] Labor shortages had always plagued his road-building efforts insparsely populated Florida and would be greatly exacerbated here.

[0346] If the writer chooses to keep the information but cannotincorporate it into the flow of the sentence with simple editing, thenthe method moves the interrupting clause to the beginning of thesentence. The writer decides if the information fits better at thebeginning. If the writer decides that it doesn't, then the method movesthe interrupting clause to the end of the sentence. The writer decidesif the information fits better at the end. The clause's content dictateswhat the writer decides. An interrupting clause containing only a fewwords may cause little confusion, but a sentence is usually smoother andkeeps the reader moving forward if the writer places it in line with theother clauses:

[0347] The Plaintiff must plead, as part of its claim, facts that showimproper conduct.

[0348] as part of its claim, The Plaintiff must plead, facts that showimproper conduct.

[0349] As part of its claim, the Plaintiff must plead facts that showimproper conduct.

[0350] Often, when one thought interrupts another, no commas willbracket the interrupting clause. Even without the set of commas, awriter often will still sense the presence of an interrupting clausebecause the sentence sounds awkward. The awkwardness arises not becausethe sentence contains too many thoughts or even difficult thoughts, butbecause one thought appears in the middle of another thought, whichmakes a sentence confusing. The writer edits the awkward and confusingsentence by searching it for the two words that go together to completethe first thought. Usually those two words are the subject and its verb,or the verb and its object. When the writer identifies those two words,they clearly delineate the interrupting clause, and the writer candelete that clause, edit a few words at the beginning and end to make itfit better, or relocate the clause to make the sentence more accessible,as seen with the example below in steps 1-4. Once the writer hasrelocated the interrupting clause, minimal editing smoothes out thesentence, as seen with the example below in steps 5-13.

[0351]1) Federal courts routinely hold that documents evaluating anemployee's performance and recommending certain action regarding thatemployee are exempt from disclosure.

[0352] 2) Federal courts routinely hold that documents evaluating anemployee's performance and recommending certain action regarding thatemployee are exempt from disclosure.

[0353] 3) Federal courts routinely hold that documents are exempt fromdisclosure evaluating an employee's performance and recommending certainaction regarding that employee.

[0354] 4) Federal courts routinely hold that documents are exempt fromdisclosure evaluating an employee's performance and recommending certainaction regarding that employee.

[0355] 5) Federal courts routinely hold that documents are exempt fromdisclosure evaluating an employee's performance and recommending certainaction regarding that employee.

[0356] 6) Federal courts routinely exempt from disclosure documentsevaluating an employee's performance and recommending certain actionregarding that employee.

[0357] 7) Federal courts routinely exempt from disclosure documentsevaluating an employee's performance and recommending certain actionregarding that employee.

[0358] 8) Federal courts routinely exempt from disclosure documentsevaluating an employee's performance and recommending certain actionregarding that employee.

[0359] 9) Federal courts routinely protect documents evaluating anemployee's performance and recommending certain action regarding thatemployee.

[0360] 10) Federal courts routinely protect documents evaluating anemployee's performance and recommending certain action regarding thatemployee.

[0361] 11) Federal courts routinely protect documents evaluating anemployee's performance and recommending certain action regarding thatemployee.

[0362] 12) Federal courts routinely protect documents that evaluate anemployee's performance and that recommend certain action regarding thatemployee.

[0363] 13) Federal courts routinely protect documents that evaluate anemployee 's performance and that recommend certain action regarding thatemployee.

[0364] If the information in an interrupting clause is necessary, cannotbe smoothed out to fit the sentence, and will not fit at the beginningor at the end of the sentence, then the writer should consider turningthe information into another sentence. Referring back to the exampleabove about labor shortages in Florida, instead of incorporating theinterrupting clause into the flow of the sentence, the writer could haveused the words better by turning the interrupting clause into its ownsentence.

[0365] Labor shortages, which had always plagued his road-buildingefforts in sparsely populated Florida, would be greatly exacerbated here

[0366] Labor shortages, which had always plagued his road-buildingefforts in sparsely populated Florida, would be greatly exacerbated here

[0367] Labor shortages had always plagued his road-building efforts insparsely populated Florida. Here they would be greatly exacerbated.

[0368] Sometimes the writer will find an interrupting clause withinanother interrupting clause. The following example contains aninterrupting clause inside another interrupting clause, an interruptingclause with no commas to set it off, and an interrupting clause thatneeds to be another sentence:

[0369] Viewed from a suitable height, the aggregating clusters ofmedical scientists in the bright sunlight of the boardwalk at AtlanticCity, swarmed there from everywhere for the annual meetings, had thelook of assemblages of social insects.

[0370] Viewed from a suitable height, the aggregating clusters ofmedical scientists in the bright sunlight of the boardwalk at AtlanticCity, swarmed there from everywhere for the annual meetings, had thelook of assemblages of social insects.

[0371] medical scientists in the bright sunlight of the boardwalk atAtlantic City, swarmed there from everywhere for the annual meetings,Viewed from a suitable height, the aggregating clusters had the look ofassemblages of social insects.

[0372] Medical scientists in the bright sunlight of the boardwalk atAtlantic City, swarmed there from everywhere for the annual meetings.Viewed from a suitable height, the aggregating clusters had the look ofassemblages of social insects.

[0373] Medical scientists in the bright sunlight of the boardwalk atAtlantic City, swarmed there from everywhere for the annual meetings.Viewed from a suitable height, the aggregating clusters had the look ofassemblages of social insects.

[0374] Medical scientists swarmed from everywhere for the annualmeetings. in the bright sunlight of the boardwalk at Atlantic City,Viewed from a suitable height, the aggregating clusters had the look ofassemblages of social insects.

[0375] Medical scientists swarmed from everywhere for the annualmeetings in the bright sunlight of the boardwalk at Atlantic City.Viewed from a suitable height, the aggregating clusters had the look ofassemblages of social insects.

[0376] Referring to FIG. 24, a method 400 at a block 401 searches for asentence containing two or more commas. If the method finds a sentencecontaining two or more commas at a block 401 the method determines at ablock 404 if any two commas are separated by four or more words. If twocommas are not separated by four or more words, at a block 404 themethod ignores the two commas and proceeds to the next rule at the block449.

[0377] If two commas are separated by four or more words, at a block 404the method marks the two commas and dims the interrupting words betweenthem. At a block 407 the writer examines the phrase between the commasand at a block 409 removes the dimmed interrupting words. If thesentence retains its meaning, at a block 449 proceeds the next rule. Ifthe sentence does not retain its meaning, at a block 413 the writermoves the interrupting words to the beginning or to the end of thesentence. If the sentence retains its meaning and flows better in the“move to the beginning” exemplar, the writer at a block 427 keeps theinterrupting words at the beginning of the sentence, edits accordingly,and proceeds to the next two commas or the next rule at the block 449.If the sentence retains its meaning and flows better in the “move to theend” exemplar, the writer at a block 427 keeps the interrupting words atthe end of the sentence, edits accordingly, and proceeds to the next twocommas or the next rule at the block 449. Otherwise, the writer retainsthe original at a block 429 and proceeds to the next rule at the block449.

Repeated Words

[0378] A reader expects to advance with each sentence. If a writerrepeats the same point, the reader does not advance, and often the pointgets lost in the repetition. A writer should take the reader forward,not backward or sideways. Often a writer can distill the essence of twosentences in one.

[0379] Pursuant to Rule 26(B)(1), Minnesota has adopted a liberalphilosophy concerning the scope of discovery. This general philosophyallows for a broad scope of discovery that encompasses any request that“appears reasonably calculated to lead to the discovery of admissibleevidence.”

[0380] Pursuant to Rule 26(B)(1), Minnesota has adopted a liberalphilosophy concerning the scope of discovery. This general philosophyallows for a broad scope of discovery that encompasses any request that“appears reasonably calculated to lead to the discovery of admissibleevidence.”

[0381] Pursuant to Rule 26(B)(1), Minnesota has adopted a liberalphilosophy concerning the scope of discovery that encompasses anyrequest that “appears reasonably calculated to lead to the discovery ofadmissible evidence.”

[0382] Pursuant to Rule 26(B)(1), Minnesota has adopted a liberalphilosophy concerning the scope of discovery that encompasses anyrequest that “appears reasonably calculated to lead to the discovery ofadmissible evidence.”

[0383] Pursuant to Rule 26(B)(1), Minnesota has adopted a liberalphilosophy that encompasses any request that “appears reasonablycalculated to lead to the discovery of admissible evidence.”

[0384] Referring now to FIG. 25, a method 450 at a block 000 searchesfor nouns and verbs repeated, or their synonyms appearing, within aradius of 250 words. If the method at a block 451 finds a repeated nounor verb or its synonym at a block 454 within the radius, at a block 457the method marks the original noun or verb and the repeated noun or verbor its synonym and presents the two sentences to the writer.

[0385] At a block 461, the writer examines the words around each markedword for ways to combine and eliminate the repetition. This is animportant part of the method 450 as there is no regular formulation of arule against redundancy. For instance, there may be a very technical useof a word that precise describes an object or action, e.g. thedifference between “slice” and “cut” may warrant the repeated use of“slice.” On the other hand, as a general rule, the repeated use of theword “slice” would be tedious without a technical justification. Thewriter edits accordingly at a block 465 and proceeds to the next rule ata block 469.

More Than One Negated Verb in a Sentence

[0386] The human brain has to work hard to absorb negatives, especiallystrings of negatives. A reader comprehends the positive much faster.Sometimes a writer must use a negative, but a writer should avoid usingmore than one negative in a sentence:

[0387] See Owen for a complete analysis of these decisions and thereason in rem jurisdiction does not exist over a res not found withinthe district.

[0388] See Owen for a complete analysis of these decisions and thereason in rem jurisdiction does not exist over a res not found withinthe district.

[0389] See Owen for a complete analysis of these decisions and thereason in rem jurisdiction exists only over a res found within thedistrict.

[0390] OR

[0391] See Owen for a complete analysis of these decisions and thereason in rem jurisdiction does not exist over a res found outside thedistrict.

[0392] Referring now to FIG. 26. A method 470 at a block 472 searchesfor a sentence containing two negated verbs. The method marks eachnegated verb at a block 475. The writer converts both verbs to thepositive at a block 478R and edits accordingly. If the sentence retainsits meaning, the writer keeps the verbs positive and at a block 473 andproceeds to the next rule. If the sentence does not retain its meaning,the writer negates both verbs again at a block 481 and proceeds to thenext rule at a block 473.

Any

[0393] Whenever the word “any” follows a negated verb, the writer canusually improve the sentence by dropping “any,” making the verbpositive, and negating the object of the verb, usually by putting theword “no” in front of the object. If the “any” is not part of a negativeconstruction, the writer often can still improve the sentence bydeleting the “any.”

[0394] In winter a deciduous tree doesn't have any leaves.

[0395] In winter a deciduous tree doesn't have any leaves.

[0396] In winter a deciduous tree has no leaves.

[0397] Become:

[0398] If you have any questions, don't hesitate to call or email.

[0399] If you have any questions, don't hesitate to call or email.

[0400] If you have questions, don't hesitate to call or email

[0401] Referring to FIG. 27, a method 500 at a block 501 searches forthe word “any.” If the “any” follows a negated verb, the writer makesthe negated verb positive at a block 507, negates the object of the verbat a block 509, and deletes the “any” at a block 511. At a block 513,the writer selects the preferred version, either the original or theedited version and proceeds to the next rule at a block 549.

[0402] If the “any” does not follow a negated verb at block 503, thewriter removes the “any” at a block 511. If the sentence retains itsmeaning, the writer deletes the “any” at a block 513 and proceeds to thenext rule. If the sentence does not retain its meaning, the writer keepsthe “any” at a block 515 and proceeds to the next rule at a block 549.

[0403] That is the final step of the four stages.

Applying The Invention To The Examples Above

[0404] In the Background section, the Microsoft Word(g) grammar checkerexamined this sentence:

[0405] There's really no choice in the matter.

[0406] . . . and got rid of the contraction:

[0407] There is really no choice in the matter.

[0408] But the problems have nothing to do with contractions. Theinvention would have alerted the writer to the “There,” (the “is,”) the“in,” and the “.”. The writer then would have deleted “There's” and “inthe matter,” and ended up with:

[0409] You have no choice.

[0410] Depending on the context, the writer might substitute anotherpronoun for “You.” The writer could even include the word “really”;that's for the writer to decide. But the writer should delete “in thematter” and “There's.”

[0411] Applying the invention to the sentences written by the senior,the lawyer, the Harvard editors, and the Stanford dean as presented inthe Background section:

[0412] First the senior:

[0413] It was during this time that many citizens, particularlystudents, came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen's three principles ofthe people had not yet been accomplished through the bloody hardships ofwar.

[0414] The senior directs the method to begin Stage One (Referring toFIGS. 1 through 27).

[0415] Stage One:

[0416] The method searches the sentence at the block 103 for the word“it.” The method marks the “It” at the block 105 and asks the writer,“Is this a pronoun?” At the block 105 the writer responds “no.” Themethod at block 107 then tries to match the “It” and the few wordsfollowing to any entry on a list 70 of known unnecessary phrases or weakconstructions beginning with “it.” At block 108 the opening construction“It was ______ that” matches an entry on the list 70 of “TypicallyUnnecessary Phrases and Weak Constructions Beginning with ‘It.’” FIG. 2.The method at block 121 dims the three words so the writer can read theother words and see that the dimmed words are unnecessary.

[0417] At FIG. 12, the block 231, the method 230 searches for the word“that.” At the block 231 the method finds a “that” and dims the word. Atthe block 237 the senior decides whether to keep the “that.” For syntaxand clarity, the senior will probably keep it.

[0418] At FIG. 8, the method at the block 167 searches for the word“of.” The method at the block 167 finds two “of's and marks them. At thefirst “of,” block 183, the senior mentally removes “three principlesof,” then mentally removes “of the people.” Deleting either would alterthe meaning of the sentence. At the block 195, the senior decides tokeep the first “of” and the words around it. Still in block 185, at thesecond “of,” the senior mentally removes “the bloody hardships of,” thenmentally removes “of war.” Although the senior might delete “the bloodyhardships of,” (and end with “had not yet been accomplished throughwar.” or “had not yet been accomplished.”), at the block 193 she decidesto keep the phrase. Still at the block 193, she also keeps “of war.”

[0419] Referring to FIG. 13, the method 250 searches for a period at theblock 251. The method finds a period and marks it. The method thensearches the previous eight words at the block 255 for a match to anyentry on the list of “Common Prepositions” (excluding “in” and “of”),273 FIG. 14. At the block 255 the method finds a match with the word“through” and dims the word. Because the writer has already examined thewords around the “of” at the block 253 and those words complete theprepositional phrase beginning with “through,” at the block 268 thewriter ignores the sign “through.”

[0420] Referring to FIG. 11, the method 220 at the block 223 searchesfor phrases that match any entry on a list of “Clichés” and a list of“Redundancies” found in FIG. 16 at 275 and 276, and words that match anyentry on a list of “Typically Unnecessary Words” found in the list 274FIG. 15. At the block 223, the method finds one match, the word “yet.”The method dims “yet” at the block 225, and the writer at the block 000decides to delete the word.

[0421] Referring to FIG. 11, the method 220 at the block 223 searchesfor phrases that match any entry on a list of “Phrases that TypicallyShould Be Shorter,” found in the lists 277 and 278 in FIG. 17. At theblock 223, the method finds no matches. Finally, referring to FIG. 17,the method 220 at the block 223 searches for word pairs in which thefirst word is typically unnecessary. At the block 223, the method findsno matches.

[0422] Stage One:

[0423] It was during this time that many citizens, particularlystudents, came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen's three principles ofthe people had not yet been accomplished through the bloody hardships ofwar{.}

[0424] ______ during this time ______ many citizens, particularlystudents, came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen's three principles ofthe people had not yet been accomplished through the bloody hardships ofwar{.}

[0425] ______ during this time ______ many citizens, particularlystudents, came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen's three principles ofthe people had not yet been accomplished through the bloody hardships ofwar{.}

[0426] ______ during this time ______ many citizens, particularlystudents, came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen 's three principlesof the people had not yet been accomplished through the bloody hardshipsof war{.}

[0427] ______ during this time ______ many citizens, particularlystudents, came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen's three principles ofthe people had not been accomplished through the bloody hardships ofwar{.}

[0428] ______ during this time many citizens, particularly students,came to the realization that Sun Yat-sen's three principles of thepeople had not been accomplished through the bloody hardships of war.

[0429] The senior directs the method to begin Stage Two.

[0430] Stage Two:

[0431] Referring now to FIG. 22, at the block 354 the method searchesfor a word ending in “ion.” At the block 354 the method finds a wordending in “ion”—“realization.” The method at the block 356 tries tomatch the word to a list 348 FIG. 19 of words that end in “ion” but haveno verb form, so cannot become a verb. At the block 356 the method findsno match. The method at the block 358 then tries to match the word to alist 347 FIG. 19 of words ending in “ion” that are already verbs. At theblock 358 the method finds no match. The method at the block 361 thentries to match the word and the phrase containing the word to a list 350FIG. 20 of known “Phrases Containing Nominalizations that End in ‘ion.’”At the block 361, the phrase “came to the realization” matches an entryon the list 350 FIG. 20. The method at the block 363 dims the phrase“came to the realization” and places the verb “realized” immediatelyafter “realization.” The senior may reject the change, but at the block363 probably will accept it.

[0432] Referring to FIG. 8, the method 165 at the block 167 searches forthe word “of” again. At the block 375 the method finds and marks thefirst “of.” The method at the block 175 tries to match the immediatelypreceding word, “principles,” to any entry on both lists ofnominalizations, Phrases Containing Nominalizations that End in ‘ion,’”FIG. 8, and Phrases Containing Nominalizations that Do Not End in‘ion,’” 349 FIG. 19. At the block 175 the method finds no match. In theStage One at the block 185 the senior already examined the words aroundthe “of” for unnecessary words and found none. Now at the block 189 thesenior examines the word immediately preceding the “of” to determine ifit is a nominalization. At the block 191 she determines it is not andkeeps the word.

[0433] Referring to FIG. 18, the method 300 at the block 303 searchesfor any of the “to be” verbs, “am,” “is,” “was,” “were,” are, “been,”and “be.” At the block 305 the method finds the word “been.” The methodat the block 305 dims “been” and marks the two following words,“accomplished” and “through.” The writer determines at the block 307that “accomplished” is a “strong” verb. At the block 309 the writer nowsearches the words preceding the “to be” verb for an object to the“strong” verb, “accomplished.” The writer at the block 309 finds “SunYat-sen's three principles of the people,” confirming that the verb ispassive. The senior decides at the block 311 that she has no reason tokeep the verb passive. She needs an actor. At the block 313 she searchesfor an actor among the words following the “strong” verb and at theblock 000 finds “the bloody hardships of war.” At the block 315 she nowdeletes the “to be” verb “been,” moves the object to a position afterthe “strong” verb, and moves the actor to a position in front of thestrong verb. Last, at the block 315, she deletes “through.”

[0434] Referring to FIG. 22, the method 352 at the block 375 marks thesecond “of” again. The method at the block 361 tries to match theimmediately preceding word, “hardships,” to any entry on both lists ofnominalizations, Phrases Containing Nominalizations that End in ‘ion,’”350 FIG. 20, and Phrases Containing Nominalizations that Do Not End in‘ion,’” 349 FIG. 19. At the block 361 the method finds no match. At theblock 371 she determines it is not and keeps the word.

[0435] Stage Two:

[0436] ______ during this time many citizens, particularly students,came to the realization realized that Sun Yat-sen's three principles ofthe people had not been accomplished through the bloody hardships ofwar.

[0437] ______ during this time many citizens, particularly students,______ realized that Sun Yat-sen's three principles of the people hadnot been accomplished through the bloody hardships of war.

[0438] ______ during this time many citizens, particularly students,______ realized that Sun Yat-sen's three principles of the people hadnot been accomplished through the bloody hardships of war.

[0439] ______ during this time many citizens, particularly students,______ realized that ______ the bloody hardships of war ______ had notaccomplished through ______ Sun Yat-sen's three principles of thepeople.

[0440] ______ during this time many citizens, particularly students,______ realized that the bloody hardships of war had not accomplishedSun Yat-sen's three principles of the people.

[0441] ______ during this time many citizens, particularly students,______ realized that the bloody hardships of war had not accomplishedSun Yat-sen's three principles of the people.

[0442] The senior directs the method to begin Stage Three.

[0443] Stage Three:

[0444] Referring to FIG. 23, the method 250 at the block 255 searchesfor a match to any entry on a list 273 FIG. 14 of “Prepositions”(excluding “in” and “of”). At the block 255 the method finds no match.

[0445] The senior directs the method to begin Stage Four.

[0446] Stage Four:

[0447] Referring to FIG. 24, the method 400 at the block 401 searchesfor pairs of commas. At the block 401 the method finds no pairs ofcommas.

[0448] Referring to FIG. 25, the method 450 at the blocks 451, 454searches for the same or synonymous words appearing more than oncewithin a radius of 250 words. The radius exceeds the number of words inthe example, but at the block 469 the method finds no repeated words orsynonyms in the example.

[0449] Referring to FIG. 26, the method 470 at the block 472 searchesfor more than one negated verb with the sentence. At the block 472 themethod finds no negated verbs.

[0450] Referring to FIG. 27, the method 500 at the block 501 searchesfor the word “any.” At the block 501 the method finds no “any.” Thefinal sentence:

[0451] During this time many citizens, particularly students, realizedthat the bloody hardships of war had not accomplished Sun Yat-sen'sthree principles of the people.

[0452] The writer proceeds to the next directed sampling.

[0453] The invention directs the writer quickly to the areas whereproblems have a high probability of existing, but allows the writer todecide if a problem exists. Then it takes the writer to the next highprobability area.

[0454] In Stage One, the invention leads the lawyer to examine sixsigns:

[0455] It should be noted that an oral notice of intent to renew, wherewritten notice is required under the terms of the lease, is sufficientto constitute an effective exercise of the option{.}

[0456] The “It” at the beginning, with the “that” following, signalsthat the opening of the sentence can either be deleted or significantlyreduced according to the method 100 FIG. 3.

[0457] ______ an oral notice of intent to renew, where written notice isrequired under the terms of the lease, is sufficient to constitute aneffective exercise of the option{.}

[0458] According to the method 165, shown in FIG. 8, the lawyer examinesthe first “of,” but here the phrase “oral notice of intent to renew” isan old legal term of art and should probably remain intact. That is thelawyer's choice.

[0459] ______ an oral notice of intent to renew, where written notice isrequired under the terms of the lease, is sufficient to constitute aneffective exercise of the option{.}

[0460] The second “of” again signals potentially unnecessary words underthe method 165 in FIG. 8. Here, the lawyer removes “the terms of,”because the terms form the lease, and the lease contains the terms. “Theterms of the lease” is repetitive.

[0461] ______ an oral notice of intent to renew, where written notice isrequired under ______ the lease, is sufficient to constitute aneffective exercise of the option{.}

[0462] The third “of” marked by the method 165 has no unnecessary wordsaround it, so the lawyer leaves it alone for now. The end of thesentence is fine.

[0463] ______ an oral notice of intent to renew, where written notice isrequired under ______ the lease, is sufficient to constitute aneffective exercise of the option.

[0464] In Stage Two, the invention marks the following signs:

[0465] ______ an oral notice of intent to renew, where written notice isrequired under ______ the lease, is sufficient to constitute aneffective exercise of the option.

[0466] The first “is” signals passive voice according to the method 300shown in FIG. 18, with a strong verb (“required”) following immediatelybehind it and the object (“written notice”) preceding it. The actor is“the lease.” The lawyer makes the verb active by deleting the “is,”placing the object (“written notice”) after “required,” and placing theactor (“the lease”) before “required,” as the method 300 indicates atthe block 315. The lawyer finishes the editing by changing “required” to“requires” and deleting “under” to fit the new sentence order.

[0467] ______ an oral notice of intent to renew, where the leaserequires written notice, ______ is sufficient to constitute an effectiveexercise of the option.

[0468] The remaining “is” and the remaining “of” each point to anominalization according to the method 352 at the blocks 354 and 375.The verb “exercises” is more forceful. When the lawyer converts thenominalization “is an effective exercise of” into its verb form, as inblock 365, “sufficient to constitute” automatically comes out. Although“option” is a nominalization indicated by the last sign “ion,” thelawyer would choose to keep it.

[0469] ______ an oral notice of intent to renew, where the leaserequires written notice, ______ exercises ______ the option.

[0470] In Stage Three, no prepositions remain to mark under the method250, so the lawyer proceeds to Stage Four, where the invention,according to the method 400 at the block 401, marks the following signand the words between:

[0471] ______ an oral notice of intent to renew{,} where the leaserequires written notice{,} ______ exercises ______ the option.

[0472] Six words separate the two commas, so the lawyer considers thefive options at method 400 to make the sentence smoother and carry thereader forward: deleting the clause under block 409, which would changethe meaning, so doesn't work; editing the clause at beginning and end tomake it fit at the block 413, which also doesn't work; making the clauseinto another sentence at the block 425, which because of its length isunnecessary; and moving the clause either to the beginning or the end ofthe sentence, either of which would work for the lawyer.

[0473] ______ where the lease requires written notice, an oral notice ofintent to renew ______ ______ exercises ______ the option.

[0474] With the unnecessary words now deleted, the passive voice andnominalization converted, and the sentence rearranged to move forward,the lawyer would see that the original sentence needed a word tocontrast the two clauses, which the lawyer now places at the beginningof the sentence: “Even.”

[0475] Even where the lease requires written notice, an oral notice ofintent to renew exercises the option.

[0476] Under the invention, the lawyer may choose different words anddifferent order. After deleting the unnecessary words, converting thepassive voice and the nominalization, and rearranging the sentence, thelawyer may decide that the context already establishes that the sentencerefers to an “option,” and so end the sentence like this:

[0477] Even where the lease requires written notice, an oral notice ofintent to renew is sufficient.

[0478] Even where the lease requires written notice, an oral notice ofintent to renew suffices.

[0479] Even where the lease requires written notice, an oral notice ofintent to renew is effective.

[0480] Or the lawyer will prefer to shift words from one clause to theother:

[0481] Even where the lease requires written notice of intent to renew,an oral notice exercises the option.

[0482] Some lawyers don't like the word “where” unless it denotesphysical location; so the lawyer could begin, “Even if the leaserequires . . . .”

[0483] The lawyer may even choose to reverse the order of the twoclauses:

[0484] An oral notice of intent to renew exercises the option, evenwhere the lease requires written notice.

[0485] The invention provides the structure for ridding all writing ofwhat is unnecessary, dull, and confusing, without affecting the writer'svoice. Once a writer has quickly addressed each sign, remaining problemsbecome easier to see, and the writer may have several ways to create thefinal expression.

[0486] In Stage One and Stage Two, the invention suggests to the editorsof the Harvard Management Communication Letter that they considertightening their sentence at these points:

[0487] The writer wants to ask a question about whether or not investorswill learn from the crash in prices{.}

[0488] “To ask a question” is a nominalization that the editors shouldconvert back to a verb as in block 171 (FIG. 8). Doing that forces theword “about” out of the sentence:

[0489] The writer wants to ______ question ______ whether or notinvestors will learn from the crash in prices{.}

[0490] Next the editors look at the “or” as in block 221 (FIG. 11) andthe word or two that follow. “Or not” is unnecessary and removed at theblock 223:

[0491] The writer wants to ______ question ______ whether ______investors will learn from the crash in prices{.}

[0492] “From” will remain, but the “in” (block 255, FIG. 13) and theperiod (block 251, FIG. 13) both signal a short prepositional phrase theeditors can delete because it over explains:

[0493] The writer wants to ______ question ______ whether ______investors will learn from the crash ______.

[0494] The editors' final sentence:

[0495] The writer wants to question whether investors will learn fromthe crash.

[0496] The sentence written by the Stanford dean produces signs at allfour stages. The invention suggests to her that she look closer at thesewords and punctuation:

[0497] Although it has been argued that emphasizing the AchievementTests in admissions, rather than SATs{,} would improve the quality ofAmerican secondary school education and consequently better preparestudents for college{,} it is also true that requiring such tests couldunfairly penalize disadvantaged students in the college admissionsprocess{.}

[0498] The “it” followed by “that” means that the dean can improve theopening by condensing or deleting those words (block 112, FIG. 3). (Ifshe decides to delete those words, she probably should change the“would” to “might” to preserve the meaning.) The word “been” (block 303,FIG. 18) also has the dean look for passive voice: Immediately to theright is the strong verb “argued” and to the left is the object “it.” Itis passive voice (block 309, FIG. 18), and the dean has two choices:make it active (block 315, FIG. 18), or remove those words and change“would” to “might”:

[0499] Although ______ emphasizing the Achievement Tests in admissions,rather than SATs{,} might improve the quality of American secondaryschool education and consequently better prepare students for college{,}it is also true that requiring such tests could unfairly penalizedisadvantaged students in the college admissions process{.}

[0500] or:

[0501] Although ______ (some argue that) ______ emphasizing theAchievement Tests in admissions, rather than SATs{,} would improve thequality of American secondary school education and consequently betterprepare students for college{,} it is also true that requiring suchtests could unfairly penalize disadvantaged students in the collegeadmissions process{.}

[0502] The word “in” signals the probability of deleting it and“admission” (block 262, FIG. 23). This sentence appears in a book about“admissions,” so that is already understood. The method will ignore this“ion” word, because the whole prepositional phrase comes out.

[0503] Although ______ emphasizing the Achievement Tests ______, ratherthan SATs{,} might improve the quality of American secondary schooleducation and consequently better prepare students for college{,} it isalso true that requiring such tests could unfairly penalizedisadvantaged students in the college admissions process{.}

[0504] When the dean sees the “of,” she knows to look to the left and tothe right for unnecessary words (blocks 185, 181-183, FIG. 8). She maydecide to keep “the quality of,” but the sentence says the same thingwithout it (block 167, FIG. 3):

[0505] Although ______ emphasizing the Achievement Tests ______, ratherthan SATs{,} might improve ______ American secondary school educationand consequently better prepare students for college{,} it is also truethat requiring such tests could unfairly penalize disadvantaged studentsin the college admissions process{.}

[0506] “Education” is a nominalization, but other words modify it, sothe dean will probably choose to leave it alone. However, she coulddecide to convert it to a verb and change that part of the sentence to“would improve the way we educate our high school students andconsequently better prepare them for college.” (That would add fourwords, but make the sentence livelier. She has the choice.) Next isanother “it” (followed by another “that”) at the beginning of a clause.The dean can rewrite the opening to that clause. The word “is” (block203, FIG. 5) signifies the possibility of passive voice, but no strongverb stands to the right.

[0507] Although ______ emphasizing the Achievement Tests ______, ratherthan SATs{,} might improve ______ American secondary school educationand consequently better prepare students for college{,} ______ requiringsuch tests could unfairly penalize disadvantaged students in the collegeadmissions process{.}

[0508] Last, the remaining “in” and the period direct the dean to morewords she can remove. Again, the book is about “college admissions,” soputting the words here over explains.

[0509] Although ______ emphasizing the Achievement Tests ______, ratherthan SATs{,} might improve ______ American secondary school educationand consequently better prepare students for college{,} ______ requiringsuch tests could unfairly penalize disadvantaged students ______.

[0510] The dean ends up with a sentence something like this:

[0511] Although emphasizing the Achievement Tests, rather than SATs{,}might improve American secondary school education and consequentlybetter prepare students for college{,} requiring such tests couldunfairly penalize disadvantaged students.

[0512] Seeing the movement of words set in motion by the invention, andthe two commas separated by more than three words, the dean may nowprefer to break this into two sentences that express her originalthought much more powerfully and succinctly:

[0513] Emphasizing the Achievement Tests, rather than SATs, mightimprove American secondary school education and consequently betterprepare students for college. But requiring such tests could unfairlypenalize disadvantaged students.

[0514] The invention also detects many opportunities to improve thesentences from the three reference books:

[0515] First, Fowler's explanation of “reduplicated” words:

[0516] Most of us find an engaging quality in these words{.} Perhapsthat is because it is through them that we enter the world of speech.

[0517] The first two signs, “of” and “in,” indicate nothing wrong. Theeditors examine them quickly, decide they can remove nothing, and go tothe end of the sentence, which also is fine. In the next sentence,“that” presents no problem. The first “is” indicates neither passivevoice nor a nominalization; the editors leave it alone. But the editorscan remove “it is” followed by “that,” as it matches an entry on thelist 70 at FIG. 2 according to method 100. The last “of” remains.

[0518] Most of us find an engaging quality in these words. Perhaps thatis because ______ through them ______ we enter the world of speech.

[0519] Resulting in:

[0520] Most of us find an engaging quality in these words. Perhaps thatis because through them we enter the world of speech.

[0521] Next, the Chicago Manual of Style's elaboration on the Americanpreference for placing punctuation inside quotation marks:

[0522] In defense of nearly a century and a half of the American style,however, it may be said that it seems to have been working fairly welland has not resulted in serious miscommunication{.}

[0523] Here, several signs work together. First, the editors see the“in” and the “of” and delete “In defense of.”

[0524] ______ nearly a century and a half of the American style,however, it may be said that it seems to have been working fairly welland has not resulted in serious miscommunication{.}

[0525] Next, the editors see the “of” and remove “of the Americanstyle.”

[0526] ______ nearly a century and a half ______, however, it may besaid that it seems to have been working fairly well and has not resultedin serious miscommunication{.}

[0527] Then they delete the unnecessary words from “it” through “that”:

[0528] ______ nearly a century and a half ______, however, ______ itseems to have been working fairly well and has not resulted in seriousmiscommunication{.}

[0529] The remaining “it” is a pronoun for “the American style,” so theeditors replace it now with the noun.

[0530] ______ nearly a century and a half ______, however, ______ theAmerican style seems to have been working fairly well and has notresulted in serious miscommunication{.}

[0531] “Been” indicates neither passive voice nor a nominalization, buta third possible problem exists: The sentence is weak at that juncture.The editors can remove “been” and change “working” to “worked.”

[0532] ______ nearly a century and a half ______, however, ______ theAmerican style seems to have ______ worked fairly well and has notresulted in serious miscommunication{.}

[0533] “In” is not a problem, and the “ion” reveals a nominalizationthat should remain; but questioning the end of the sentence, the editorscould decide that “and has not resulted in serious miscommunication”repeats “seems to have worked fairly well.” It is over explaining. Theymay choose either clause.

[0534] ______ nearly a century and a half ______, however, ______ theAmerican style seems to have ______ worked fairly well ______.

[0535] Or:

[0536] ______ nearly a century and a half ______, however, ______ ______the American style ______ ______ has not resulted in seriousmiscommunication.

[0537] For either version, the editors would now add the word “For” atthe beginning:

[0538] For nearly a century and a half, however, the American styleseems to have worked fairly well.

[0539] Or:

[0540] For nearly a century and a half, however, the American style hasnot resulted in serious miscommunication.

[0541] The editors may find a more succinct way to express “has notresulted in,” e.g., “has avoided,” but that is up to them. Last, theOxford English Dictionary's definition of “redundancy”:

[0542] The incorporation of extra parts in the design of a mechanical orelectronic system in such a way that its function is not impaired in theevent of a failure{.}

[0543] The “ion” suffix and the word “of” signal a nominalization. Thecleaner way to express this is to use the gerund form of the verb,“incorporating.”

[0544] Incorporating ______ extra parts in the design of a mechanical orelectronic system in such a way that its function is not impaired in theevent of a failure{.}

[0545] “In” is not a problem this time, but the “of” tells the editorsthey can probably get rid of a few words here and still say the samething.

[0546] Incorporating ______ extra parts in ______ a mechanical orelectronic system in such a way that its function is not impaired in theevent of a failure{.}

[0547] What follows the “or” should remain in the sentence, because itdoes not repeat what precedes the “or”; but the second “in” directs theeditors to more unnecessary words: “in such a way” becomes “so.” Theeditors might keep the word “that,” but it can come out

[0548] Incorporating ______ extra parts in ______ a mechanical orelectronic system so ______ its function is not impaired in the event ofa failure{.}

[0549] The word “function” is a nominalization and a verb, but canremain in its noun form if the editors chose. That choice depends onwhat they do with the remaining problems. The “is” reveals passivevoice, with the strong verb two words to the right (“impaired”) and theobject to the left (“function”). However, before they try to make itactive, the editors should deal with the remaining signs. “In the event”becomes “if.” The word “failure” is a nominalization, but the inventionwill not detect it. However, when the editors remove “in the event” andreplace it with “if,” “failure” may become the verb “fails.” It also mayremain “failure.” The signs not only reveal discrete editing problems,they often interact or lead to solving problems with no signs.

[0550] Incorporating ______ extra parts in ______ a mechanical orelectronic system so ______ its function is not impaired if a failureoccurs.

[0551] Incorporating extra parts in a mechanical or electronic system soits function is not impaired if a failure occurs.

[0552] Or:

[0553] Incorporating ______ extra parts in ______ a mechanical orelectronic system so ______ its function is not impaired if one partfails.

[0554] Incorporating extra parts in a mechanical or electronic system soits function is not impaired if one part fails.

[0555] Although both possibilities remain in the passive voice, theywork well, so the editors may choose to keep them passive. Bothpossibilities also work well if the editors decide to make them active.

[0556] Incorporating extra parts in a mechanical or electronic system soits function is not impaired if one part fails.

[0557] Incorporating extra parts in a mechanical or electronic system soif one part fails, the failure will not impair its function.

[0558] Or:

[0559] Incorporating extra parts in a mechanical or electronic system soits function is not impaired if a failure occurs.

[0560] Incorporating extra parts in a mechanical or electronic system soa failure will not impair its function.

[0561] Another possibility the editors might choose:

[0562] Incorporating extra parts in a mechanical or electronic system soif one part fails, the system will continue to function.

[0563] The writer can use the signs in any order to spot potentialproblems. Sometimes there are no problems; sometimes two signs indicatethe same problem; sometimes two signs point out related problems;sometimes dealing with one sign negates another. Often by dealing withthe signs, and correcting the problems revealed, a writer begins to seeother problems that have no signs but that the writer would not havenoticed without the movement of words created by using the signs.

[0564] Some of the densest writing in the English language comes fromlawyers, not because their writing has to be that way, but because noone has ever taught lawyers how to express themselves without crowdingmore words than necessary into a sentence. Here's an example from afederal judge, who was graduated from Yale University and Harvard LawSchool. This is the opening paragraph of a manuscript he has written onreforming the judicial system. He labored a long while to get theparagraph this tight:

[0565] It is no secret that, from the standpoint of client interests,modern litigation is an outright disaster. The costs of adversarylitigation have become so disproportionate to the benefits that a trialof the merits of a lawsuit provides virtually no possibility of justice.The verdict comes too late, and the expense is too high. In practice,litigation is capable of producing justice only by agreement, and onlywhen the agreement is reached early in the case. For this to become thenorm, however, rather than the rare exception, will require basicchanges in attitude on the part of everyone involved in the system.

[0566] Microsoft Word® finds the passage perfect. It notes that thepassage comprises one paragraph, five sentences, 104 words, and 517characters; that it averages five sentences per paragraph, 20.8 wordsper sentence, and 4.8 characters per word. Next, Word® assesses thepassage's “readability”; it reveals the percentage of passive sentencesas 20, and rates the passage, according to the “Flesch Reading Ease” at45.8, and according to the “Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level” at 12.0. Word®says nothing else about the passage.

[0567] When the judge is ready to edit his manuscript, he directs theinvention to begin Stage One on the first paragraph. The inventionsearches for “it,” “there,” “in,” “of” “.,” “as,” “or,” and “that.,”plus matches to any entry on the lists: unnecessary phrases that contain“it,” “there,” “in,” “of,” “as,” or “or”; clichés, redundancies, weakconstruction, unnecessary words, and pairings in which the first word isunnecessary. The invention marks the following words:

[0568] It is no secret that, from the standpoint of client interests,modern litigation is an outright disaster{.} The costs of adversarylitigation have become so disproportionate to the benefits that a trialof the merits of a lawsuit provides virtually no possibility ofjustice{.} The verdict comes too late, and the expense is too high{.} Inpractice, litigation is capable of producing justice only by agreement,and only when the agreement is reached early in the case{.} For this tobecome the norm, however, rather than the rare exception, will requirebasic changes in attitude on the part of everyone involved in thesystem{.}

[0569] The judge then examines each marked word and the words aroundthem and determines that some should stay, but that the sentences wouldretain their meaning if he deleted others:

[0570] It is no secret that, from the standpoint of client interests,modern litigation is an outright disaster{.} The costs of adversarylitigation have become so disproportionate to the benefits that a trialof the merits of a lawsuit provides virtually no possibility ofjustice{.} The verdict comes too late, and the expense is too high{.} Inpractice, litigation is capable of producing justice only by agreement,and only when the agreement is reached early in the case{.} For this tobecome the norm, however, rather than the rare exception, will requirebasic changes in attitude on the part of everyone involved in thesystem{.}

[0571] The judge deletes or replaces the words with no meaning. If thejudge changes nothing around a marked sign, the invention now ceases tomark that sign.

[0572] ______, from ______ client interests, modern litigation is a______ disaster. The costs ______ have become so disproportionate to thebenefits that a trial ______ ______ provides virtually no possibility ofjustice. The verdict comes too late, and the expense is too high. ______litigation is capable of producing justice only by agreement, and onlywhen the agreement is reached early ______. For this to become the norm,however, rather than the rare exception, will require ______ changesfrom ______ everyone involved ______.

[0573] With the paragraph less cluttered, the judge instructs theinvention to begin Stage Two. The invention searches for “am,” “is,”“was,” “were,” “are,” “been,” “be,” the suffix “ion,” and “of” (again):

[0574] ______, from ______ client interests, modern litigation is a______ disaster. The costs ______ have become so disproportionate to thebenefits that a trial ______ ______ provides virtually no possibility ofjustice. The verdict comes too late, and the expense is too high. ______litigation is capable of producing justice only by agreement, and onlywhen the agreement is reached early ______. For this to become the norm,however, rather than the rare exception, will require ______ changesfrom ______ everyone involved ______.

[0575] Using the marked words to guide him, the judge tests each signfor passive voice, nominalizations, and weak construction:

[0576] ______, from ______ client interests, modern litigation is a______ disaster. The costs ______ have become so disproportionate to thebenefits that a trial ______ ______ provides virtually no possibility ofjustice. The verdict comes too late, and the expense is too high. ______litigation is capable of producing justice only by agreement, and onlywhen the agreement is reached early ______. For this to become the norm,however, rather than the rare exception, will require ______ changesfrom ______ everyone involved ______.

[0577] The judge tightens the weak wording and converts one passivevoice to active. If the judge changes nothing around a marked sign, theinvention now ceases to mark that sign:

[0578] ______, from ______ client interests, modern litigation is a______ disaster. The costs ______ have become so disproportionate to thebenefits that a trial ______ ______ provides virtually no possibility ofjustice. The verdict comes too late, and the expense is too high. ______litigation produces justice only by agreement, and only when the partiesagree ______ ______ early ______. For this to become the norm, however,rather than the rare exception, will require ______ changes from ______everyone involved ______.

[0579] The judge now directs the invention to begin Stage Three, inwhich the invention searches for all remaining prepositions (excluding“of” and “in”).

[0580] ______, from ______ client interests, modern litigation is a______ disaster. The costs ______ have become so disproportionate to thebenefits that a trial ______ ______ provides virtually no possibility ofjustice. The verdict comes too late, and the expense is too high. ______litigation ______ produces justice only by agreement, and only when theparties agree ______ ______ early ______. For this to become the norm,however, rather than the rare exception, will require ______ changesfrom ______ everyone involved ______.

[0581] With these words marked, the judge decides if he can delete anyof the prepositional phrases begun by the marked words. Two areunnecessary, the first and the last. The judge deletes both, and theinvention ceases to mark the other prepositions:

[0582] ______ modern litigation is a ______ disaster. The costs ______have become so disproportionate to the benefits that a trial ____________ provides virtually no possibility of justice. The verdict comestoo late, and the expense is too high. ______ litigation ______ producesjustice only by agreement, and only when the parties agree ______ ______early ______. For this to become the norm, however, rather than the rareexception, will require ______ changes ______ ______.

[0583] In the final stage, Stage Four, the judge instructs the inventionto mark pairs of commas separated by more than three words, the same orsimilar substantive words appearing more than once, two negated verbs inthe same sentence, and the word “any” following a negated verb.

[0584] ______ modern litigation is a ______ disaster. The costs ______have become so disproportionate to the benefits that a trial ____________ provides virtually no possibility of justice. The verdict comestoo late, and the expense is too high. ______ litigation ______ producesjustice only by agreement, and only when the parties agree ______ ______early ______. For this to become the norm, however{,} rather than therare exception{,} will require ______ changes ______ ______.

[0585] The judge examines the words between the two commas anddetermines they form a clause that over explains the preceding clause.The judge deletes them:

[0586] ______ modern litigation is a ______ disaster. The costs ______have become so disproportionate to the benefits that a trial ____________ provides virtually no possibility of justice. The verdict comestoo late, and the expense is too high. ______ litigation ______ producesjustice only by agreement, and only when the parties agree ______ ______early ______. For this to become the norm, however,______ ______

[0587] ______ will require ______ changes ______ ______.

[0588] With those words deleted, the judge has edited the paragraphtightly.

[0589] ______ ______, modern litigation is a ______ disaster. The costs______ have become so disproportionate to the benefits that a trial______ ______ provides virtually no possibility of justice. The verdictcomes too late, and the expense is too high. ______ litigation ______(produces) justice only by agreement, and only when the (parties agree)early ______. For this to become the norm, however, ______ ______ willrequire ______ changes ______ ______ ______.

[0590] Recasting the sentence results in:

[0591] Modern litigation is a disaster. The costs have become sodisproportionate to the benefits that a trial provides virtually nopossibility of justice. The verdict comes too late, and the expense istoo high. Litigation produces justice only by agreement, and only whenthe parties agree early. For this to become the norm, however, willrequire changes.

[0592] Removing unnecessary words allows the judge to see other ways toimprove the paragraph. Although no signs remain that the judge has notexamined, when he edits the paragraph this far, he may choose to replacewords or rearrange sentences. For example, he could improve the endingby writing, “will require new ways of thinking,” or “will require a newapproach to justice.” Instead of leaving the end of the fourth sentence,“and only when the parties agree early,” he could write, “and only whenagreement comes early.” For slightly more eloquence and better syntax,he could reverse the order of that sentence to end up with, “Only byagreement can litigation produce justice, and only when agreement comesearly.” After the invention has gotten him this far, the judge's naturalwriting style will dictate how he chooses to improve the sentence.

[0593] Few grammatically correct paragraphs will be more dense anddifficult to understand than the final example, which comes from apatent application, U.S. Pat. No. 5,678,053, Column 2, lines 51-62. Theapplication is entitled “Grammar Checker Interface.” Under “Field ofInvention,” the applicant briefly describes what he has created: “Thisinvention relates to grammar checking systems and more particularly to aconvenient interface for immediately indicating how to correct animproper sentence.” To indicate missing words, the applicant proposesusing a caret, or inverted V.

[0594] At the end of the Summary of the Invention lies the example:

[0595] It will be appreciated that by positioning the caret below theline of text, there is no occurrence in which the caret would be locatedthrough a character or piece of text on that line. While the caret ispresently envisaged as providing an indication of the requirement forthe insertion of a word between words in which there would be a spacebetween the words, the caret can also be utilized to indicatemisspellings in which a given character in the word is indicated asbeing in error or wrong. Thus the subject system can indicate not onlymissing words within a sentence but also can be utilized to indicatewhich letters in a word are wrong from a spelling point of view.

[0596] Microsoft Word® finds two problems with the paragraph: First, ithighlights every word from the first “that” to the word “line” at theend of the first sentence. In the “Suggestions” box, the window reads,“Wordiness (no suggestions).” Second, it highlights the entire secondsentence. In this “Suggestions” box, Word® offers, “Long sentence (nosuggestions).” Word® finds nothing to improve in the third sentence. Inthe pop-up, “Readability Statistics,” Word® gives the counts: oneparagraph, three sentences, 124 words, 557 characters; offers theaverages, three sentences per paragraph, 41.3 words per sentence, 4.4characters per word. Under “readability,” Word® finds that the “FleschReading Ease” score is 37.9, that the “Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level” is12.0, and that two of the three sentences are passive.

[0597] The invention reveals to the applicant that all three sentencesare passive; that the first contains two passive verbs, the secondcontains three passive verbs, and the third contains one passive verb.The invention also shows the applicant how to delete at least 80 of the124 words, and, once the applicant has deleted those 80 words, how toreduce the number even further.

[0598] In Stage One,the invention marks the following words:

[0599] It will be appreciated that by positioning the caret below theline of text, there is no occurrence in which the caret would be locatedthrough a character or piece of text on that line{.} While the caret ispresently envisaged as providing an indication of the requirement forthe insertion of a word between words in which there would be a spacebetween the words, the caret can also be utilized to indicatemisspellings in which a given character in the word is indicated asbeing in error or wrong{.} Thus the subject system can indicate not onlymissing words within a sentence but also can be utilized to indicatewhich letters in a word are wrong from a spelling point of view{.}

[0600] The applicant examines each marked word and the words around it:

[0601] It will be appreciated that by positioning the caret below theline of text, there is no occurrence in which the caret would be locatedthrough a character or piece of text on that line{.} While the caret ispresently envisaged as providing an indication of the requirement forthe insertion of a word between words in which there would be a spacebetween the words, the caret can also be utilized to indicatemisspellings in which a given character in the word is indicated asbeing in error or wrong{.} Thus the subject system can indicate not onlymissing words within a sentence but also can be utilized to indicatewhich letters in a word are wrong from a spelling point of view{.}

[0602] ______ by positioning the caret below the line______ ______,______ the caret would (never) be located through a character ____________. While the caret is ______ ______ an indication of therequirement for the insertion of a word between words ______ ______between the words, the caret can also be utilized to indicatemisspellings ______ a given character ______ is ______. Thus the subjectsystem can indicate not only missing words within a sentence but alsocan be utilized to indicate which letters ______ are wrong ____________.

[0603] In Stage Two, the invention marks these signs:

[0604] ______ by positioning the caret below the line ______ ______,______ the caret would (never) be located through a character ____________. While the caret is ______ ______ an indication of therequirement for the insertion of a word between words ______ ______between the words, the caret can also be utilized to indicatemisspellings ______ a given character ______ is ______. Thus the subjectsystem can indicate not only missing words within a sentence but alsocan be utilized to indicate which letters ______ are wrong ____________.

[0605] and the applicant examines each, looking for passive voice,nominalizations, and weak constructions.

[0606] ______ by positioning the caret below the line ______ ______,______ the caret would (never) be located through a character ______.While the caret is ______ ______ an indication of the requirement forthe insertion of a word between words ______ ______ between the words,the caret can also be utilized to indicate misspellings ______ a givencharacter ______ is ______. Thus the subject system can indicate notonly missing words within a sentence but also can be utilized toindicate which letters ______ are wrong ______ ______.

[0607] ______ by positioning the caret below the line ______ ______,______ the caret would never overlay ______ ______ a character ____________. While the caret ______ ______ indicates the requirement toinsert ______ ______ a word between words ______ between the words, thecaret can also ______ indicate misspellings ______ a given character______ is ______. Thus the subject system can indicate not only missingwords within a sentence but also can ______ indicate which letters______ are wrong ______ ______.

[0608] The applicant now instructs the invention to look for allremaining prepositions under Stage Three:

[0609] ______ by positioning the caret below the line ______ ______,______ the caret would never overlay ______ ______ a character ____________. While the caret ______ ______ indicates the requirement toinsert ______ ______ a word between words ______ between the words, thecaret can also ______ indicate misspellings ______ a given character______ is ______. Thus the subject system can indicate not only missingwords within a sentence but also can ______ indicate which letters______ are wrong ______ ______.

[0610] The applicant examines the marked signs and deletes more words:

[0611] ______ by positioning the caret below the line ______ ______,______ the caret would never overlay ______ ______ a character ____________. While the caret ______ ______ indicates the requirement toinsert ______ ______ a word between words ______ between the words, thecaret can also ______ indicate misspellings ______ a given character______ is ______. Thus the subject system can indicate not only missingwords within a sentence but also can ______ indicate which letters______ are wrong ______ ______.

[0612] ______ by positioning the caret below the line ______ ______,______ the caret would never overlay ______ ______ a character ____________. While the caret ______ ______ indicates the requirement toinsert ______ ______ a word ______ ______ ______ ______ ______, thecaret can also ______ indicate misspellings ______ a given character______ is ______. Thus the subject system can indicate not only missingwords ______ but also can ______ indicate which letters ______ are wrong______ ______.

[0613] Before entering Stage Four, the applicant would delete otherwords rendered unnecessary by the invention or change words that nolonger fit.

[0614] ______ by positioning the caret below the line ______ ______,______ the caret would never overlay ______ ______ a character ____________. While the caret ______ ______ indicates the requirement toinsert ______ ______ a word ______ ______ ______ ______ ______, thecaret can also ______ indicate misspellings ______ a given character______ is ______. Thus the subject system can indicate not only missingwords ______ but also can ______ indicate which letters ______ are wrong______ ______.

[0615] ______ by positioning the caret below the line ______ ______,______ it ______ would never overlay ______ ______ a character ____________. While the caret ______ ______ indicates the need to insert______ ______ a word ______ ______ ______ ______ ______ ______, it______ can also ______ indicate misspellings ______ ______ ____________. Thus the subject system can indicate not only missing words______ but also can ______ indicate which letters ______ are wrong______ ______.

[0616] Finally resulting in:

[0617] By positioning the caret below the line, it would never overlay acharacter. While the caret indicates the need to insert a word, it canalso indicate misspellings. Thus the subject system can indicate notonly missing words but also can indicate which letters are wrong.

[0618] In Stage Four, the invention reveals what the applicant can seeby reading what remains:

[0619] By positioning the caret below the line, it would never overlay acharacter. While the caret indicates the need to insert a word, it canalso indicate misspellings.

[0620] Or

[0621] By positioning the caret below the line, it would never overlay acharacter. The subject system can indicate not only missing words butalso can indicate which letters are wrong.

[0622] Or

[0623] By positioning the caret below the line, it would never overlay acharacter. While the caret indicates the need to insert a word, it canalso indicate which letters are wrong.

[0624] Or

[0625] By positioning the caret below the line, it would never overlay acharacter. The subject system can indicate not only missing words butalso misspellings.

[0626] The second and third sentences convey the same two thoughts. Theapplicant needs only one of the sentences, and either or a combinationof the two will suffice. The applicant may now realize that the firstsentence relates to neither of the latter two sentences. When theparagraph arrives at this level of clarity, the applicant may even wishto make the statement tighter by adding words.

[0627] Once a sentence is grammatical, problems with clarity,conciseness, and readability still arise from thousands ofpossibilities. A writer can spot a majority of these problems bysearching among the universe of possibilities for a defined set ofsigns. The invention provides writers with these signs and how to usethem. To aid the writers in searching for the signs, programmers canincorporate the invention in software. The invention even streamlinesand simplifies the job of professional editors and publishers byproviding them with specific clues to begin the process. Hundreds if notthousands of texts on writing already exist, and the software industryhas produced several spelling and grammar/style checking programs, butnothing hones the editing process to a simple, concise, consistentmethod. Using the invention does not expose everything wrong with asentence, but it directly exposes most of the problems and in thatprocess often reveals others.

[0628] In a writing course or text based on the invention, a teacher canillustrate the method and show students how to use it to enhance theirwriting. Because the invention is precise and focuses on specific words,programmers can turn the invention into software for computer use.

[0629] A writer may use this method either manually or with a computer.A preferred method of manually using the system is with an editing card,which narrows the writer's attention to a single line. The writer slidesthe card down a page of written work one line at a time, focusing thewriter's attention, preventing the writer's eye from wandering aimlesslyover paragraphs of text. To guide the writer's eye toward potentialproblems, the key signs and selected words appear on the obverse side ofthe card. To instruct the writer on the meaning of the signs, anexplanation of each appears on the reverse side of the card.

[0630] Referring now to FIGS. 28 and 29, the obverse of each of twopreferred embodiments of the card 550 are portrayed. The principledifference between the two preferred embodiments shown is presence of anaperture 554 in the first embodiment shown in FIG. 28. The aperture 554defines the scrutinized sentence. The dimensions of the aperture areselected appropriately to display a sentence in a given font size andstyle and further to limit the length of the display to a generallyreadable sentence. While there is nothing grammatically wrong with longsentences, the selection of a suitable dimension would tend to limit theuse of an unduly long sentence where several distinct sentences mightcarry the meaning in a more lively and readable rhythm. The aperturewill not preclude use on longer sentences as an author might use an edgeof the card 550 to direct the attention of the author to the sentenceunder scrutiny as in the second embodiment shown in FIG. 29.

[0631] Referring to FIGS. 28 and 29, the presence of “it” 560 serves toremind the author of the method 10 FIG. 1 for removing useless words atthe beginning of the sentence. Similarly, the presence of “in” 562reminds the author of the method 150 for spotting many unnecessaryphrases as shown in FIG. 7. The method 165, shown in FIG. 8, forremoving unnecessary words in proximity to “of” is suggested by “of”564. The period “.” 566 suggests the method 250 shown in FIG. 13 forremoving over explaining. The words “to be” suggest the method 300 forfinding the passive voice set forth in FIG. 18.

[0632] Nominalizations generally end in “-ion.” The presence of “ion”570 recalls the method 352 for spotting and removing nominalizationsshown in FIG. 22. The group 572 comprising “as,” “or,” “any,” and “that”recall methods of removing useless words shown in FIGS. 10, 11, 27, and12 respectively. The group of prepositions 574 invokes the method 250illustrated in FIG. 13. Finally, the group of “junk” words 576 is wordsthat should almost always be removed from active, vivid writing.

[0633] To provide instruction on the use of the card, the reverse 551shown in FIG. 30 sets forth the meaning of the various signs on theobverse 550. Additionally, the reverse 551 sets forth an abbreviated setof instructions for use of the card.

[0634] To aid the writers in searching for the signs, programmers canincorporate the invention in software. The invention even streamlinesand simplifies the job of professional editors and publishers byproviding them with specific clues to begin the process. Hundreds if notthousands of texts on writing already exist, and the software industryhas produced several spelling and grammar/style checking programs, butnothing hones the editing process to a simple, concise, consistentmethod. Using the invention does not expose everything wrong with asentence, but it directly exposes most of the problems and in thatprocess often reveals other problems.

[0635] In a writing course or text based on the invention, a teacher canillustrate the method and show students how to use it to enhance theirwriting. Because the invention is precise and focuses on specific words,programmers can turn the invention into software for computer use.

[0636] A computer-based embodiment of the invention is possible usingthe methods set forth in the preceding figures, FIGS. 1-30. Referring toFIG. 31, a splash screen 600 explains an overview of the preferredcomputer based embodiment of the method. Referring, to FIG. 32, in thescreenshot 605, the first clause of a sentence is under scrutiny, “Itshould be noted that the trial court's finding . . .” The methods of theinvention will seek to improve this sentence.

[0637] In FIG. 33, the screenshot 610 portrays the presence of “it” toinvoke the method 100 FIG. 3, specifically the scanning at the block105, shown in FIG. 3. FIG. 34 portrays the further identification of thepresence of that in a second screenshot 615, as the method 100 setsforth at the block 107. After the method 100 decides that no core wordsexist as required at the block 111, the method 100 then removes thewords between “it” and “then” resulting in the screenshot 620 shown inFIG. 35. The clause, as improved, now reads, “The trials court's finding. . .” The method 100 will move to the next rule at the block 123.Further rules might determine that removing the nominalization “finding”might be appropriate, in light of the unrevealed portion of thesentence.

[0638] While the preferred embodiment of the invention has beenillustrated and described, as noted above, many changes can be madewithout departing from the spirit and scope of the invention. Forexample, for example, the method might be used for teaching rather thanfor editing. Accordingly, the scope of the invention is not limited bythe disclosure of the preferred embodiment. Instead, the inventionshould be determined entirely by reference to the claims that follow.

What is claimed is:
 1. A method for editing and enhancing readability ofauthored documents, the method comprising: A stage 1, stage 1comprising: Searching for occurrences of first signs, the first signsselected from a list comprising “it,” “there,” “in,” “of,” “as,” “or,”“that,” and the punctuation marks “.” and “;”; Removing phrases matchingany entry on a list of commonly used unnecessary phrases that begin withor contain “it,” “there,” “in,” “of,” “as,” “or,” or “that.”; Replacingcommon cliches and redundancies with equivalents as found in list;Replacing common lengthy construction with equivalents as found in list;and Searching for common redundant pairs as found in list andeliminating a first word of the pair; A stage 2, stage 2 comprising:Searching for occurrence of second signs, the second signs selected froma list comprising “am,” “is,” “was,” “were,” “are,” “been,” and “be”;Replacing phrases matching any entry on a list of commonly usedunnecessary phrases that contain “of”; Replacing nominalizations withequivalents as found in a list; and Replacing passive voice constructionwith equivalents as found in a list; Replacing common weak constructionwith equivalents as found in list; A stage 3, stage 3 comprising:Searching for remaining prepositions and making substitution accordingto list; and A stage 4, stage 4 comprising: Searching for pairs ofcommas separated by more than three words; Searching for the same orsynonymous nouns and verbs appearing more than once; Searching for morethan one negated verb in a sentence; and Search for word “any” followinga negated verb.